Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You answer the question directly and add a relevant personal detail. To sound more natural, avoid repeated fillers such as “yeah” and “like,” and say “gave me” or “bought me” instead of “gifted me.” Use “riding it” rather than “riding that” when referring to the bike.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven. My grandfather gave it to me as a birthday present, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

提案: You give a clear opinion, but several grammar and phrasing errors make the answer difficult to follow. Use “children like,” “ride bikes,” and “ride to school.” Avoid the unclear phrase “for in the playground”; instead, organize your examples with a linking phrase such as “for example” or “especially.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. They often ride them to school or play on them in the park. In the afternoons, you can also see children cycling around their neighborhoods.

× Yeah, I did have a bike when I was like maybe seven or something. Yeah, my grandfather gifted me that bike and I loved riding that.

✓ Yeah, I did have a bike when I was like maybe seven or something. Yeah, my grandfather gifted me that bike and I loved riding it.

Use it to refer back to the bike. That is a demonstrative word and sounds unnatural here as the object of riding. Use a personal pronoun when referring to an already-mentioned object.

× Many children likes to ride bike even for the schools, for in the playground, and in the afternoon like around the streets.

✓ Many children like to ride bikes to school, in playgrounds, and on the streets in the afternoon.

Children is plural, so it takes the base verb like, not likes. Match the verb to the subject, and remember that plural subjects generally take the base form of the verb in the present simple.

× Many children likes to ride bike even for the schools, for in the playground, and in the afternoon like around the streets.

✓ Many children like to ride bikes to school, in playgrounds, and on the streets in the afternoon.

When referring generally to bicycles, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular bike. Use plural forms for countable nouns when speaking about them generally.

× Many children likes to ride bike even for the schools, for in the playground, and in the afternoon like around the streets.

✓ Many children like to ride bikes to school, in playgrounds, and on the streets in the afternoon.

The prepositions for and for in are incorrect in these phrases. Use to school to describe the destination, in playgrounds to describe a location, and on the streets for the usual expression. Choose prepositions based on the relationship you want to express.