Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use the past tense consistently: “Yes, I did” or “No, I didn’t.” Your meaning is partly clear, but the final phrase, “but my mom’s,” is incomplete. Explain whether your mother agreed with your father or felt differently. Use natural phrasing such as “was worried I might get hurt” and connect your reason with “because.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, although I really wanted one. Most of my friends had bikes, so I often felt left out. My dad wouldn’t buy me one because he was worried I might get hurt, but my mom thought I was old enough to ride safely.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then add one or two relevant details explaining who rides them or why. Avoid unclear phrases such as “have hazard” and “like you were asking me about bicycle Ride”; they make your answer difficult to understand. Use present tense for a general situation and keep the answer focused on the question.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. Many children learn to ride when they are young, and some people also cycle to nearby places because it’s convenient and affordable.

× Yes I do had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about a past experience, so use the past-tense verb had. Do is not needed before had in this affirmative sentence.

× But my dad won't buy me any bikes because he hates that the fact that I can be get hurt but my mom's.

✓ But my dad wouldn't buy me a bike because he was afraid I might get hurt, but my mom would.

The sentence describes what happened during your childhood, so use past forms such as wouldn't and was afraid rather than won't and hates. Keep the verb tenses consistent with the past context.

× But my dad won't buy me any bikes because he hates that the fact that I can be get hurt but my mom's.

✓ But my dad wouldn't buy me a bike because he was afraid I might get hurt, but my mom would.

Can be get hurt is not a correct modal construction. Use might get hurt to express the possibility of being injured in the past. After a modal verb, use the base form of the verb: might get.

× But my dad won't buy me any bikes because he hates that the fact that I can be get hurt but my mom's.

✓ But my dad wouldn't buy me a bike because he was afraid I might get hurt, but my mom would.

Can be get hurt incorrectly combines be with get. Use get hurt, or use be hurt, but do not combine them in this way.

× But my dad won't buy me any bikes because he hates that the fact that I can be get hurt but my mom's.

✓ But my dad wouldn't buy me a bike because he was afraid I might get hurt, but my mom would.

Hates that the fact is an incorrect combination; use either hates the fact that or is afraid that. Also, my mom's does not complete the contrast, so use my mom would to make clear that she would buy a bike.

× I mean yeah, they are like most of when I was child a lot of child have hazard when they are like small like you were asking me about bicycle Ride.

✓ I mean, yeah, bikes are popular. When I was a child, a lot of children had bikes when they were young. That relates to your question about riding bicycles.

Use the article a before the singular countable noun child: a child. Articles are needed with singular countable nouns when referring to one person or thing.

× I mean yeah, they are like most of when I was child a lot of child have hazard when they are like small like you were asking me about bicycle Ride.

✓ I mean, yeah, bikes are popular. When I was a child, a lot of children had bikes when they were young. That relates to your question about riding bicycles.

A lot of refers to a plural countable noun, so use children rather than child. Use bikes and bicycles when referring to more than one bike.

× I mean yeah, they are like most of when I was child a lot of child have hazard when they are like small like you were asking me about bicycle Ride.

✓ I mean, yeah, bikes are popular. When I was a child, a lot of children had bikes when they were young. That relates to your question about riding bicycles.

The clause When I was a child describes the past, so use had rather than have to describe what children possessed at that time.

× I mean yeah, they are like most of when I was child a lot of child have hazard when they are like small like you were asking me about bicycle Ride.

✓ I mean, yeah, bikes are popular. When I was a child, a lot of children had bikes when they were young. That relates to your question about riding bicycles.

The original response joins several incomplete and unclear clauses without a clear sentence structure. Separate the ideas into complete sentences, and use a clear clause to connect the final point to the examiner's question.