Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then explain that your father taught you to ride as a teenager. The phrases “were my father told me” and “I had a boy” are unclear; say “my father taught me” and “I had a bike.” Reduce fillers such as “I mean” and “like,” and use a linking word to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but I didn’t really use it because I couldn’t ride. My father taught me when I was a teenager, and I started cycling after that.

提案: State your opinion clearly and avoid repeated words and self-corrections. Use “for transportation” or “to get around” rather than “to transfer.” Support your answer with a specific reason or example, and use a linking phrase such as “because” or “although” to make the contrast clear.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people rely on cars to get around. However, you can still see people cycling in parks or in some city areas, especially for exercise.

× I didn't know how to ride a bicycle until my teenage years were my father told me.

✓ I didn't know how to ride a bicycle until my teenage years, when my father taught me.

The original sentence incorrectly joins clauses with were, making the sentence structure unclear. Use when to introduce the event that happened during the teenage years. Taught me is a natural way to express that the father showed the student how to ride.