Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense, since the question asks about your childhood. The phrase about your father is difficult to understand; say clearly that he bought the bike for you. Avoid fillers and repeated words, and add one specific detail about how you used the bike.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bike that my dad bought for me when I was eight. It was a lovely gift, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

提案: State your opinion clearly in the first sentence. Replace unclear phrases such as “similar a move” with a natural comparison, and explain briefly who uses bikes or why they are popular. Use a linking word such as “for example” to introduce a specific detail, and reduce fillers and repetition.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, much like in many other countries. For example, children often learn to ride them when they are young, while some adults use them for exercise or short trips.

× Yes I have a bike it was red.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. It was red.

The question asks about the speaker’s childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had rather than have to describe owning the bike then.

× I guess my dad had umm bottom head bite to me.

✓ I guess my dad bought a bike for me.

The context refers to a completed event in the past, so use the past-tense verb bought. The phrase in the original is unclear, but if the intended meaning is that the father purchased the bike, say bought a bike for me.

× It was really good gift.

✓ It was a really good gift.

Gift is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before gift.

× In my opinion it it is similar a move with the other countries.

✓ In my opinion, it is similar to what happens in other countries.

The adjective similar is followed by the preposition to, not a. Use similar to when comparing things or situations.

× It's starting with childhood.

✓ It starts in childhood.

The sentence describes when biking generally becomes popular, so use the simple present starts rather than the present progressive is starting. Use in childhood to refer to that period of life.