Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two clear details. Use the past tense consistently: “rode” and “went.” Correct the unnatural phrases “ride out bicycle” and “by school,” and say “play with my friends” rather than “pray with my friends.” Finish your sentence instead of trailing off, and keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike and rode it quite often when I was a child. I used it to get to my piano lessons and to play with my friends after school.

提案: Give a clear opening answer and explain why bikes are popular with a complete, logical sentence. The phrase “go to their walk in Japan” is unclear; say who uses bikes and for what purpose. Use a linking phrase such as “because,” and complete your final thought rather than stopping at “want.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan, especially for short trips. Many people cycle to nearby shops or train stations because the trains and buses can be very crowded during rush hour. Cycling can also be a convenient way to get around.

× When I was a child, I usually ride out bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, I usually rode a bicycle.

The sentence describes a repeated activity during childhood, so use the past-tense verb rode instead of ride. Use a before the singular countable noun bicycle. A useful pattern for past habits is usually + past-tense verb.

× For example, I go to the piano lesson by school

✓ For example, I went to piano lessons after school.

The answer refers to what you did as a child, so use the past-tense form went. After school is a natural phrase if you mean that the lessons took place after the school day. Use piano lessons when referring to lessons in general.

× and also I want to I like to ride bicycle when I pray with my friends because

✓ I also liked riding a bicycle with my friends.

The original contains two competing phrases, I want to and I like to, which make the sentence structure incomplete and confusing. Choose one idea and form a complete sentence. Because the answer is about childhood, liked is consistent with the past context. Use a before the singular countable noun bicycle.

× Yes, I think so there are a lot of people who use bicycles to go to their walk in Japan trains and buses are very crowded, especially during rush hours.

✓ Yes, I think so. There are a lot of people who use bicycles to get around. In Japan, trains and buses are very crowded, especially during rush hours.

The original joins several independent ideas without appropriate punctuation, making the sentence difficult to follow. Separate the ideas into complete sentences. Get around is a natural expression for traveling locally; use it instead of to go to their walk.