Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答开头直接回应了问题，但后续内容较难理解，且有较多重复和停顿。注意过去经历要使用过去时，例如将“have”改为“had”，“bring”改为“brought”。建议按“何时得到自行车—谁带你去买—自行车的样子或你的感受”组织内容，并控制在3至4句内。表达颜色时可以说“a beautiful pink bike”。

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven. My family lived in the countryside, so my mother took me to the city to buy one. It was a beautiful pink bike, and I was really excited to ride it.

提案: 你表达了自己的看法和原因，但句子不完整，且“the larger population and the car”等表达不够清楚。先明确回答自行车是否受欢迎，再用具体、合理的原因支持观点；可以说明在你所在的城市，许多人选择汽车或公共交通，以及拥挤道路对骑行的影响。注意避免重复使用“the”和“to”，并用完整句子收尾。

例: I wouldn't say bikes are especially popular in my city. Many people choose cars or public transport, partly because the roads are often crowded and cycling can feel unsafe. However, shared bikes are still commonly used for short trips.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was 7.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was 7.

句子描述的是你7岁时的经历，时间已经过去，因此应该用一般过去时。have 的过去式是 had。

× and then remember this is the first day of my mom.

✓ And then I remembered that this was the first day of my mom.

原句缺少主语 I；remember 也需要与过去的叙述时间保持一致，改为 remembered。this is 改为 this was，使从句时态与过去语境一致。

× My mom bring me go to the city.

✓ My mom brought me to the city.

这句话叙述过去发生的事，bring 应使用过去式 brought。此外，表达“带某人去某地”时用 bring someone to a place，不需要再接 go。

× because when I was young, I'm we we live in the countryside

✓ because when I was young, we lived in the countryside

这里描述的是小时候的居住情况，应使用一般过去时 lived。I'm 与后面的 we 重复且不符合句子结构，应删去；口语中的重复也应避免。

× we get to go to the city

✓ we got to go to the city

句子讲述的是过去的经历，因此 get 应改为过去式 got。另外，city 前通常需要定冠词 the。

× the bike's not really popular in China

✓ Bikes are not really popular in China.

这里泛指自行车这一类事物，应使用复数 bikes，并搭配 are。bike's 通常表示“自行车的”或“自行车是”，不适合表达一般意义上的自行车。

× because we have the L larger population and the the car.

✓ because we have a larger population and cars.

population 在这里是单数可数名词短语的一部分，前面应使用不定冠词 a，而不是 the。泛指汽车时用复数 cars；the the 是重复用词，应删去一个。

× We prefer like to to use the another way instead of.

✓ We prefer to use another way instead.

another 本身已经包含“另一个”的意思，前面不能再加 the。prefer 后可接 to do，写作 prefer to use。instead 可单独表示“而不是／作为替代”；instead of 后面还需要接名词或动名词。