Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答过去是否有自行车，注意时态应使用过去式“did”。然后用一两句话说明自行车的数量或相关经历。注意“two or two to three”表达重复，“bike”应使用复数“bikes”；“my our house”也需要改正。请明确说明别人到家里做什么，以及这件事为什么让你难过，避免因果关系不清。

例: Yes, I did. My dad bought me two or three bikes when I was a child. I felt sad because people sometimes came to our house to borrow my bike.

提案: 回答切题，也举了共享单车作为例子。表达时可说“shared bikes”或“bike-sharing services”，而不是“the share bike”。“finish their home to subway”不自然，建议改为“travel between home and the subway station”。可以补充共享单车方便通勤这一具体原因。

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use shared bikes to travel between home and the nearest subway station. They’re convenient for short trips, especially during rush hour.

× Yes I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

问题中的时间是“when you were a child”，指过去，因此应使用过去式“had”，而不是现在式“have”。回答过去的问题时，注意让动词时态与问题中的时间保持一致。

× When I was a child my dad bought me like 2 or two to three bike because some people will come to my our house to store my bike which made me really sad.

✓ When I was a child, my dad bought me two or three bikes because some people would come to our house to store my bikes, which made me really sad.

“two or three”表示数量超过一个，因此后面的可数名词“bike”应使用复数“bikes”。描述多辆自行车时，后文也应使用“my bikes”。数量词后要检查名词是否需要变复数。

× When I was a child my dad bought me like 2 or two to three bike because some people will come to my our house to store my bike which made me really sad.

✓ When I was a child, my dad bought me two or three bikes because some people would come to our house to store my bikes, which made me really sad.

整句话描述童年时发生的情况，所以“will come”应改为“would come”，表示过去视角下可能反复发生的事情。讲述过去的经历时，应避免直接使用表示将来的“will”。

× When I was a child my dad bought me like 2 or two to three bike because some people will come to my our house to store my bike which made me really sad.

✓ When I was a child, my dad bought me two or three bikes because some people would come to our house to store my bikes, which made me really sad.

“my our house”重复使用了两个所有格限定词。应只保留“our”，写成“our house”。使用所有格时，每个名词前只需要一个所有格限定词。

× We even have the share bike for people that can rent to finish their home to subway or subway to home.

✓ We even have shared bikes that people can rent to travel from home to the subway or from the subway to home.

这里的“共享单车”应表达为“shared bikes”。“shared”是过去分词，在这里作形容词修饰“bikes”；不能用动词原形“share”直接修饰名词。

× We even have the share bike for people that can rent to finish their home to subway or subway to home.

✓ We even have shared bikes that people can rent to travel from home to the subway or from the subway to home.

表达从一个地点前往另一个地点时，应使用“from … to …”。原句中的“their home to subway”缺少表示起点的“from”，而后半部分也应保持相同的介词结构。描述具体的地铁时，通常说“the subway”。