Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add a specific detail about where or when you rode your bike. Say “to school and around my neighborhood,” rather than “to school and neighborhood.” Keep the past tense consistent (“made me feel like I was”) and replace the unusual “free bird flying in the clouds” image with a more natural description, such as feeling independent. Avoid filler words like “uh.”

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it to school and around my neighborhood. It was a lot of fun and made me feel independent.

提案: Give a clear answer about your country, then support it with one understandable reason or example. Use “my country” rather than “our countries,” and correct the subject–verb agreement (“children receive”). The phrase “free cycles” is unclear, and the sentence is too long; use shorter sentences and suitable linking words such as “for example” or “because.”

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many children learn to ride one when they are young, and some receive a tricycle as a birthday present. Adults also use bikes for short journeys and exercise.

× I used to ride it to school and neighborhood.

✓ I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood.

The phrase ‘to school and neighborhood’ does not use a natural preposition for both destinations. Use ‘to school’ for the destination and ‘around the neighborhood’ to describe riding in that area.

× It really gave me a lot of good memories and always made me feel like I am a free bird flying in the clouds.

✓ It really gave me a lot of good memories and always made me feel like I was a free bird flying in the clouds.

The sentence describes feelings in the past, so ‘was’ should match the past-tense verbs ‘gave’ and ‘made.’ Keep the tense consistent when describing a past experience.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

The examiner asks about one country, so ‘countries’ should be singular: ‘country.’ Match singular and plural nouns to the intended meaning.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country, even when children are receiving bikes on their first birthday, and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

‘The child’ is singular and cannot take the plural verb ‘are.’ Since the sentence refers to children generally, use the plural subject ‘children’ with ‘are.’

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycles but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

‘They’ refers to more than one item, so the countable noun ‘bicycle’ must be plural: ‘bicycles.’ Make countable nouns plural when referring to multiple objects.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child has experience of bike in their childhood.

The student is describing a general fact about children, so use the present-tense ‘has’ rather than the past-tense ‘had.’ Use the present tense for habits and general truths.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of bike in their childhood.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our countries even when the child are receiving bikes on their first birthday and they are not bicycle but are free cycles and every child had experience of a bike in their childhood.

‘Bike’ is a singular countable noun, so it needs a determiner. Add ‘a’ before it, or use the plural ‘bikes’ when speaking generally.