Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，并且提供了自行车来源和个人感受，结构基本清晰。不过有两个明显的词语错误：“write”应改为“ride”，“read it very well”表达不自然，应改为“rode it very well”或“was good at riding it”。建议使用“because”或“so”连接细节，并补充一个具体用途或活动，使答案更加自然、有效。注意控制在2—3句内，避免重复表达。

例: Of course I did. It was a birthday gift from my parents, so I treasured it. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school, and I was quite good at it.

提案: 回答观点明确，也提到了环保和健康两个理由，但存在较多语法和词汇问题：“introduct”应改为“produce”或“emit”，“friend friendly”应改为“environmentally friendly”，“to environment”应改为“to the environment”，“people health”应改为“people’s health”。此外，“In other words”使用不准确，因为后面不是对前句的改述；可以使用“Also”或“Moreover”。建议先给出观点，再用“because”和“also”连接两个具体理由。

例: Definitely. Bikes are popular in my country because they don’t emit carbon dioxide, so they are environmentally friendly. They are also good for people’s health and can help reduce traffic congestion.

× Definitely because cycling doesn't introduct carbon dioxide.

✓ Definitely, because cycling doesn't introduce carbon dioxide.

在助动词“doesn't”后面必须使用动词原形，因此应将“introduct”改为“introduce”。这里描述的是普遍事实，所以使用一般现在时。建议记住：doesn't + 动词原形。

× In other words, it's friend friendly to environment.

✓ In other words, it's environmentally friendly.

“friend friendly”不是正确的英语表达。“环境友好的”应使用形容词短语“environmentally friendly”，其中“environmentally”修饰“friendly”。建议积累固定表达，例如“environmentally friendly”。

× In other words, it's friend friendly to environment.

✓ In other words, it's friendly to the environment.

“environment”在这里表示特定的自然环境，前面通常需要定冠词“the”，所以应说“the environment”。建议在表示特定事物或大家都知道的事物时使用“the”。

× In addition it it is useful for people health.

✓ In addition, it is useful for people's health.

“it it”重复使用了代词，只保留一个“it”即可。此外，“people health”应改为“people's health”，表示“人们的健康”。建议检查句子中是否重复使用代词，并注意表示所属关系时使用“'s”。