Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use the past tense consistently because you are talking about your childhood: say “I had,” “my dad bought,” and “I learned.” Organize the answer with a direct opening, followed by two clear details about the bike and why it was special. Avoid repetition such as “I learned” and “I have learned it,” and replace “I learned first” with the natural phrase “I learned how to ride it.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was yellow and had flowers on it, so it looked very cheerful. My dad bought it for me when I was five, and I learned how to ride it in our neighborhood. It was my favorite possession because I spent a lot of time riding it with my friends.

提案: Answer the question directly in the present tense by saying whether bikes are popular or not. Use accurate expressions such as “Bikes are not very popular in Istanbul” and “There are not enough bike lanes.” Connect your reasons with linking words such as “because” and “as a result,” and avoid unclear phrases like “I didn’t take bikes are popular” and “it isn’t any comfortable.” You could also mention that heavy traffic and the city’s crowded roads make cycling less convenient.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Istanbul, especially in the city center. The city is extremely crowded, and many people rely on public transport or private cars. In addition, there are not enough bike lanes, so cycling can feel unsafe and inconvenient. As a result, most residents choose other forms of transportation.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a finished period in the past, so use the past-tense form had instead of the present-tense form have.

× I have a bike which is umm has yellow flowers on it.

✓ I had a bike that had yellow flowers on it.

The original sentence incorrectly combines which is and has. Use a relative clause with one main verb: that had. The past tense had is appropriate because the bike belonged to the speaker during childhood.

× It was my favorite because my dad has bought me when I was five years old.

✓ It was my favorite because my dad bought it for me when I was five years old.

The event happened at a specific time in the past, so use the simple past bought instead of the present perfect has bought. Also, buy something for someone requires the preposition for, and it refers to the bike.

× I learned 1st and I have learned it.

✓ I learned how to ride it when I was five years old.

The original sentence uses an unclear expression and changes incorrectly from the past tense learned to the present perfect have learned. Because the learning happened in the past, use the simple past learned. The phrase learned how to ride it clearly expresses the intended meaning.

× I didn't take bikes are popular on my city.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my city.

This is a general opinion about the present, so use don't think rather than the past-tense didn't think. After think, use a complete clause: bikes are popular. Use the preposition in with city.

× Istanbul is most crowded place on earth.

✓ Istanbul is the most crowded city in the world.

A superlative adjective normally requires the definite article the. City is more precise than place when describing Istanbul, and in the world is the natural expression for this comparison.

× You always use transportations or your own cars.

✓ People usually use public transportation or their own cars.

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun, so it is not normally used as transportations in this meaning. Public transportation is the natural expression. People and their also make the sentence more consistent and general.

× We don't have any bike roads and it isn't any like, uh, most comfortable or it's.

✓ There aren't any bike lanes, and cycling isn't very comfortable.

Use the there are structure to state that plural things do not exist: There aren't any bike lanes. The second part needs a clear subject and verb, so cycling isn't very comfortable is grammatically complete.