Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and use the correct past tense: “I didn’t have” rather than “I don’t have.” Also, “play with toys” is more natural than “play toys,” and a real bicycle is different from a toy bike. Add one specific detail about what you played with or why you did not have a bicycle.

例: No, I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child. However, I used to play with toy cars and toy bicycles at home. I think I enjoyed playing with them because I was interested in vehicles.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid unclear or irrelevant expressions such as “my Gordon Confucian” and “ultimately addicted to bikes.” Use linking words to explain your opinion, and support it with specific reasons or examples. “Many young people are interested in bicycles” is more natural and precise than “the new generation boys.”

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many teenagers ride them for exercise, transportation, and entertainment. For example, it is common to see groups of young people cycling in parks or along rivers at weekends.

× Of course not. I don't have any bike when I was a child, but I used to play toys, including bikes, cars, etcetera.

✓ Of course not. I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I used to play with toys, including bikes, cars, and so on.

Because the question refers to the past, use the simple past form didn't have, not the present form don't have. The singular countable noun bike requires the article a. The verb play is followed by the preposition with when referring to toys or games: play with toys. In formal speech, and so on is more natural than etcetera.

× Of course, bikes are popular in my Gordon Confucian most of the new generation boys are ultimately addicted to bikes.

✓ Of course, bikes are popular in my country, and most boys of the new generation are very interested in them.

The original sentence contains two independent ideas joined without a suitable conjunction or clear punctuation, so its structure is difficult to understand. Use a comma and the conjunction and to connect the ideas. The phrase in my Gordon Confucian is not grammatically meaningful in this context; in my country is the appropriate phrase. Most boys of the new generation is a clearer word order, and them avoids unnecessary repetition of bikes.