Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ в целом соответствует вопросу, но есть проблема со временем: речь идёт о прошлом, поэтому нужно использовать “had”, “was” и “liked”, а не “have” и “is”. Избегайте повторов синонимов “attractive, pretty, beautiful” и неоднократного “very”. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одну конкретную деталь и причину. Постарайтесь говорить плавнее и ограничить ответ двумя-тремя логично связанными предложениями.

例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. I really liked it because it looked attractive and was very easy to ride. I often used it to play with my friends near my home.

提案: Основная идея понятна, но ответ недостаточно точный и связный. Используйте правильные выражения “in my country”, “bike-sharing stations” и “cycling paths” вместо неясных фраз “in the country and city” и “bake station”. После прямого ответа приведите одну-две конкретные причины, например низкую стоимость, удобство или экологичность. Уберите длинные паузы и несвязанный список мест; свяжите детали словами “because”, “for example” и “also”.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people use them because they are affordable, convenient, and environmentally friendly. For example, cities have bike-sharing stations and cycling paths near parks and sports centres.

× Yes, of course I have a bike.

✓ Yes, of course, I had a bike.

The question asks about a past period, when you were a child, so use the past tense had instead of the present tense have.

× I have a red bike.

✓ I had a red bike.

Because you are describing a possession during your childhood, the past-tense form had is required.

× I really like this bike because it's very attractive, very pretty beautiful.

✓ I really liked this bike because it was very attractive and beautiful.

The answer refers to a bike you had as a child, so use liked and was. The adjectives should also be joined with and rather than placed next to each other without a conjunction.

× So this bike is very good.

✓ So this bike was very good.

Use the past-tense verb was because the bike is being discussed in the context of your childhood.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in the country and city.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities.

The plural noun cities is more appropriate when speaking generally about urban areas. The phrase my country also makes the meaning clearer.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in the country and city.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities.

The phrase the country is unnatural when you mean your own country. Use my country instead. When speaking about cities in general, do not use the before cities.

× For example, they are more station, bake, bake station, bike station, children's place, place, volleyball, basketball and bike ride.

✓ For example, there are more bike stations, children's play areas, volleyball and basketball courts, and bike-riding paths.

Use there are to introduce the existence of several plural things. The original phrase they are more station is not grammatically correct. Also, use plural nouns because you are listing several places and facilities.

× For example, they are more station, bake, bake station, bike station, children's place, place, volleyball, basketball and bike ride.

✓ For example, there are more bike stations, children's play areas, volleyball and basketball courts, and bike-riding paths.

Several items are being mentioned, so use plural forms such as stations, areas, courts, and paths. The singular forms station and ride do not fit this list.

× For example, they are more station, bake, bake station, bike station, children's place, place, volleyball, basketball and bike ride.

✓ For example, there are more bike stations, children's play areas, volleyball and basketball courts, and bike-riding paths.

The original sentence contains incomplete and repeated phrases, such as bake and place, and the list is not organized grammatically. Use a complete there are structure and connect the listed nouns clearly.