Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và có đưa ra lý do cũng như hoạt động cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, cần sửa một số lỗi dùng từ và ngữ pháp: “paid me a bike” nên là “bought me a bike”, “when I school tried” nên là “when I started school”, và “roll it” nên là “ride it”. Câu trả lời hiện quá dài và nối nhiều ý bằng “and”, vì vậy nên tách thành 2–3 câu rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, “improve my fitness” phù hợp hơn với việc đạp xe thường xuyên khi lớn, nên bạn có thể nhấn mạnh đây là hoạt động thời thơ ấu hoặc thói quen hiện tại.

例: Yes, absolutely. My parents bought me a bike when I started school so that I could learn how to ride. I often rode it in the park, which was a fun way to stay active.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm khi nói rằng xe đạp phổ biến, nhưng câu trả lời bị ngắt giữa chừng và có nhiều lỗi lặp từ. “pike” cần là “bikes”, “my countries” nên là “my country”, và “my people in my country” nên đổi thành “many people in my country”. Bạn nên nêu ít nhất một lý do hoàn chỉnh, chẳng hạn xe đạp thuận tiện, tiết kiệm và tốt cho sức khỏe, đồng thời thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về học sinh hoặc người dân đi xe đạp. Hãy tránh lặp “like riding a bike” và kết thúc câu đầy đủ.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them because they are affordable, convenient, and good for their health. For example, students often cycle to school, especially in smaller towns.

× Yes, absolutely. My parents paid me a bike when I school tried so I could learn to ride and practice my cycling skills and I often roll it in the park to improve my fitness.

✓ Yes, absolutely. My parents paid me a bike when I was at school so I could learn to ride and practice my cycling skills, and I often rode it in the park to improve my fitness.

The phrase when I school tried is not grammatically complete. It needs a subject and a verb, so it should be when I was at school. The sentence also needs clearer coordination and punctuation to connect the two main ideas.

× Yes, absolutely. My parents paid me a bike when I school tried so I could learn to ride and practice my cycling skills and I often roll it in the park to improve my fitness.

✓ Yes, absolutely. My parents paid me a bike when I was at school so I could learn to ride and practice my cycling skills, and I often rode it in the park to improve my fitness.

The question asks about a past experience, so the past tense is needed. Was is the past form of be, and rode is the past form of ride. Use consistent past-tense verbs when describing activities you did as a child.

× Yes, in my opinion pike are very popular in my countries because my people in my country like riding a bike like riding a bike to improve their

✓ Yes, in my opinion, bikes are very popular in my country because people in my country like riding bikes to improve their fitness.

Bikes is plural because the sentence refers to bicycles in general. Country should be singular because the speaker is referring to one country. Also, bikes is more natural than a bike when discussing bicycles generally.

× Yes, in my opinion pike are very popular in my countries because my people in my country like riding a bike like riding a bike to improve their

✓ Yes, in my opinion, bikes are very popular in my country because people in my country like riding bikes to improve their fitness.

The original sentence is incomplete because it ends after their and does not provide the noun that their modifies. It also repeats like riding a bike. A complete sentence should end with a clear idea, such as improve their fitness.