Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有明显的语法、词汇和表达问题。首先应直接回答“有”，并使用过去时，因为问题询问的是童年经历；“bag”应为“bike”，“purple back”可以改为“purple bike”。其次，“when I in my 5 year old birthday”表达不正确，应说“when I was five”或“for my fifth birthday”。避免重复“My mother bought it”，并按照“直接回答＋具体细节”的结构组织答案。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was purple, and my mother bought it for my fifth birthday. I still remember riding it around my neighborhood.

提案: 回答有比较儿童和成年人的思路，但句子没有完成，且时态、主谓一致和搭配错误较多。例如，“yes it is”应改为“Yes, they are”，“in the past”应使用过去时，“more and more adult had take part”应改为“more and more adults have taken up cycling”。建议先明确表达观点，再用“However”连接过去与现在的变化，并具体说明成年人骑车增加的原因，例如健康意识、环保或骑行社群。

例: Yes, bikes are very popular among children, and they are becoming more popular among adults as well. In the past, most adults preferred to drive, but recently many have taken up cycling because it is good for their health and the environment. Cycling groups have also become common in my city.

× Yes I have a bag and I still remember that is that was a ride and purple back and my mother bought it and my and my mother bought it for me when I in my 5 year old birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, and I still remember that it was bright purple. My mother bought it for me when I was five years old.

问题中的“have”表示现在时，但题目询问的是童年时期的经历，所以应使用过去时“had”。“is”也应改为过去时“was”。表示年龄时应说“when I was five years old”，不能说“when I in my 5 year old birthday”。

× Yes I have a bag and I still remember that is that was a ride and purple back and my mother bought it and my and my mother bought it for me when I in my 5 year old birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, and I still remember that it was bright purple. My mother bought it for me when I was five years old.

“that is that was”中缺少正确的主语和代词。这里应使用“it”指代前面提到的自行车，因此应说“it was”。“my and my mother”重复且代词顺序错误，改为“My mother”即可。

× Yes I have a bag and I still remember that is that was a ride and purple back and my mother bought it and my and my mother bought it for me when I in my 5 year old birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, and I still remember that it was bright purple. My mother bought it for me when I was five years old.

原句包含多个重复和不完整的结构，例如“that is that was”“my and my mother”以及“when I in”。应将信息分成结构完整的句子，并确保每个从句都有主语和谓语。

× Well, if you mean popular among the children, then yes it is, but among the adults the bicycle is not that popular in the past but recently with the. But in the recent year with the development of our society, more and more adult had take part in the group of.

✓ Well, if you mean popular among children, then yes, they are. However, bicycles were not very popular among adults in the past. In recent years, with the development of our society, more and more adults have taken part in cycling groups.

“bikes”是复数，因此后面不能用单数代词“it”，应使用“they”。“adult”表示多个成年人时应改为复数“adults”。“year”在“近年来”的意思中通常使用复数“years”。

× Well, if you mean popular among the children, then yes it is, but among the adults the bicycle is not that popular in the past but recently with the. But in the recent year with the development of our society, more and more adult had take part in the group of.

✓ Well, if you mean popular among children, then yes, they are. However, bicycles were not very popular among adults in the past. In recent years, with the development of our society, more and more adults have taken part in cycling groups.

“in the past”表示过去的情况，所以应使用过去时“were”，而不是现在时“is”。描述过去不受欢迎的情况时，主语“bicycles”与“were”保持一致。

× more and more adult had take part in the group of.

✓ More and more adults have taken part in cycling groups.

助动词“have”后面需要使用过去分词，因此“take”应改为“taken”。同时，“adults”应使用复数形式。这里使用“have taken part in”可以表示近年来逐渐参与这一活动的趋势。

× but recently with the. But in the recent year with the development of our society, more and more adult had take part in the group of.

✓ However, in recent years, with the development of our society, more and more adults have taken part in cycling groups.

“but recently with the”是不完整的从句，后面缺少完整的主语和谓语。“But”在这里重复且连接不自然，可以改为“However”，并将原因状语“with the development of our society”放在完整句子中。

× but recently with the. But in the recent year with the development of our society, more and more adult had take part in the group of.

✓ However, in recent years, with the development of our society, more and more adults have taken part in cycling groups.

原句以“with the”结尾，句子没有完成；“the group of”后面也缺少必要内容，导致句子结构不完整。可以将这些片段合并为一个完整句子：“In recent years, more and more adults have taken part in cycling groups.”