Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural, direct, and well developed. You provide specific details about the bike, where you practiced, and your experience learning to ride. To sound slightly more natural, replace “children's bike” with “child-sized bike” or “small bike,” and replace “because it kept falling over” with “because I kept falling off it,” since the rider—not usually the bike—is described as falling.

例: Yes, I had a small red bike when I was a child, and that was where I first learned to ride. I spent many afternoons practicing in the park. I still remember getting a few bruises because I kept falling off, but I eventually became quite confident.

提案: Your response has a clear topic sentence, an effective contrast using “however,” and specific reasons. However, “RCDs” appears to be an incorrect or unclear word; use “roads,” “cities,” or “urban areas,” depending on your intended meaning. Also, write “bike-friendly” with a hyphen and avoid repeating “bikes/bicycle” by using “cycling” in the final sentence.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in the Philippines, especially for short trips and exercise. However, many roads and urban areas are not very bike-friendly because they are congested with cars and lack safe cycling lanes. As a result, cycling can be difficult and unsafe in many parts of the country.