Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接且包含了具体细节（粉色自行车、五岁、父亲教骑车），内容比较生动。建议使用连接词将信息分开，并修正语法：用“bought”代替“brought”，在“training wheels”后加逗号或句号；“they thought it can improve”应改为“because they thought it could improve”。答案最好控制为2—3个清晰句子，避免信息堆叠。

例: Yes, my parents bought me a small pink bike when I was about five years old. My dad taught me how to ride it without training wheels because he thought it would improve my balance. I really enjoyed cycling around our neighborhood after that.

提案: 回答观点明确，也提到了共享单车带来的便利和低成本，但存在较多语法和表达问题。“there are many people go”应改为“many people go”或“there are many people who go”；“by bikes”更自然的说法是“by bike”；“since the introduction...”缺少主语和谓语；“people with especially students”应改为“people, especially students”。建议使用“Moreover”或“because”连接原因，并补充一个具体场景或结果。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people, especially students, ride them to school or work because cycling is cheap and convenient. Moreover, the introduction of bike-sharing schemes has made bicycles even more accessible in cities.

× Yes, my parents brought me a small pink bike when I was around five years old and my dad taught me how to ride a bike without the training wheels they thought it can improve my balance

✓ Yes, my parents bought me a small pink bike when I was around five years old, and my dad taught me how to ride a bike without the training wheels because they thought the bike could improve my balance.

原句包含多个分句，但缺少必要的标点和连接词，导致句子结构不清楚。应在并列分句之间使用逗号，并使用 because 表示原因。这里将 brought 改为 bought 是为了准确表达“买给我”，属于词汇改进，不是语法错误。

× Yes, my parents brought me a small pink bike when I was around five years old and my dad taught me how to ride a bike without the training wheels they thought it can improve my balance

✓ Yes, my parents bought me a small pink bike when I was around five years old, and my dad taught me how to ride a bike without the training wheels because they thought the bike could improve my balance.

主句使用了一般过去时 thought，因此后面的情态动词通常要使用过去式 could，而不是现在式 can。应说 “they thought the bike could improve my balance”。

× Yes, my parents brought me a small pink bike when I was around five years old and my dad taught me how to ride a bike without the training wheels they thought it can improve my balance

✓ Yes, my parents bought me a small pink bike when I was around five years old, and my dad taught me how to ride a bike without the training wheels because they thought the bike could improve my balance.

原句中的 it 指代不清，而且 training wheels 是复数，使用 it 容易造成指代混乱。直接重复名词 the bike 可以使意思更清楚。

× Yes, I think there are many people go to school or go to work by bikes and since the introduction of the shared bikes become more convenient and affordable for people with especially students.

✓ Yes, I think many people go to school or work by bike, and since the introduction of shared bikes, cycling has become more convenient and affordable, especially for students.

There are 后面不能直接接 “people go” 这种完整结构。这里直接使用主语 many people 更自然。There be 句型后面如果要接动作，应使用定语从句，例如 “There are many people who go to school by bike”。

× Yes, I think there are many people go to school or go to work by bikes and since the introduction of the shared bikes become more convenient and affordable for people with especially students.

✓ Yes, I think many people go to school or work by bike, and since the introduction of shared bikes, cycling has become more convenient and affordable, especially for students.

原句把两个意思不同的部分直接连接在一起，并且缺少清晰的主语和谓语。第二部分应明确说明 cycling has become more convenient，并用逗号和 and 连接两个完整分句。

× Yes, I think there are many people go to school or go to work by bikes and since the introduction of the shared bikes become more convenient and affordable for people with especially students.

✓ Yes, I think many people go to school or work by bike, and since the introduction of shared bikes, cycling has become more convenient and affordable, especially for students.

since 表示“自从……以来”，通常需要使用现在完成时来表示从过去持续到现在的变化。因此，become 应改为 has become。主语 cycling 是第三人称单数，所以使用 has。

× Yes, I think there are many people go to school or go to work by bikes and since the introduction of the shared bikes become more convenient and affordable for people with especially students.

✓ Yes, I think many people go to school or work by bike, and since the introduction of shared bikes, cycling has become more convenient and affordable, especially for students.

原句中 become 缺少与主语相匹配的助动词。改正后主语是单数名词 cycling，因此应使用 has become，而不是直接使用 become。

× Yes, I think there are many people go to school or go to work by bikes and since the introduction of the shared bikes become more convenient and affordable for people with especially students.

✓ Yes, I think many people go to school or work by bike, and since the introduction of shared bikes, cycling has become more convenient and affordable, especially for students.

表示交通方式时，通常说 by bike，而不是 by bikes。句末的 with especially students 也不能正确表达“尤其是对学生而言”，应改为 especially for students。

× Yes, I think there are many people go to school or go to work by bikes and since the introduction of the shared bikes become more convenient and affordable for people with especially students.

✓ Yes, I think many people go to school or work by bike, and since the introduction of shared bikes, cycling has become more convenient and affordable, especially for students.

especially 应放在它所修饰的对象前面或句末清楚地修饰对象。这里 especially 修饰 students，因此应放在 for students 前面，形成 especially for students。