Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ควรใช้กาลอดีตให้ถูกต้อง เพราะคำถามถามถึงวัยเด็ก เช่น “I had” และ “when I was five”. ควรใช้วลี “learn to ride a bike” ไม่ใช่ “ride in a bike” และหลีกเลี่ยงคำหรือวลีที่ไม่ชัดเจน เช่น “write about its value fun and a nice attribute”. ควรตอบโดยเริ่มจากคำตอบตรง ๆ แล้วเพิ่มรายละเอียดเกี่ยวกับผู้ที่ช่วยสอนและความรู้สึกของคุณ โดยใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น “because” หรือ “and”.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was five years old. It was my first bike, and my older brother taught me how to ride it. I enjoyed riding it because it was fun and gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: ควรใช้ประธานพหูพจน์ให้สอดคล้องกับ “bikes” เช่น “they are” หรือ “bikes are”. ควรแก้ “it usually only for a short ride only” เป็น “they are usually used for short trips” และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้ “only” ซ้ำซ้อน คำตอบมีเหตุผลที่ดีเรื่องการประหยัดน้ำมัน แต่ควรจัดประโยคให้ชัดเจนด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น “because” และ “however” รวมทั้งเพิ่มตัวอย่างเฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น การเดินทางในละแวกบ้านหรือการไปตลาด.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. They are inexpensive to use because they do not require gasoline, and they are convenient for travelling around local neighbourhoods. However, people usually do not use them for long distances because of the hot weather and heavy traffic.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was five years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was five years old.

The phrase when I was five years old refers to a finished time in the past, so the past-tense form had is required. Use have for the present and had for the past.

× It was my first time learning how to ride in a bike.

✓ It was my first time learning how to ride a bike.

The verb ride takes the object directly when referring to riding a bicycle. Therefore, do not use the preposition in before a bike. The correct pattern is ride a bike.

× It was my first time learning how to ride in a bike my brother helped me learn how to write about its value fun and a nice attribute.

✓ It was my first time learning how to ride a bike, and my brother helped me learn. It was fun.

The original sentence joins several ideas without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions, making it difficult to understand. Separate the ideas into complete sentences or join them with a suitable conjunction. Also, use clear wording to express the intended meaning.

× Yes, it is a popular way to go places because it doesn't use any gasoline.

✓ Yes, bikes are a popular way to go places because they don't use gasoline.

The subject bikes is plural, so the sentence should use the plural noun bikes and the plural pronoun they. The singular pronoun it and singular verb form does not agree with bikes.

× Yes, it is a popular way to go places because it doesn't use any gasoline and you can ride a bike anywhere.

✓ Yes, bikes are a popular way to go places because they don't use gasoline, and you can ride them anywhere.

The pronouns it and it refer incorrectly to the plural noun bikes. Use they as the subject pronoun and them as the object pronoun when referring to bikes.

× But it usually only for a short ride only.

✓ But they are usually suitable only for short rides.

The original sentence has no main verb after the subject it. Add the verb are. Because the subject refers to bikes, use the plural pronoun they. Also, use only once to avoid unnecessary repetition.

× But it usually only for a short ride only.

✓ But bikes are usually suitable only for short rides.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are, not a singular verb form. The sentence also needs an adjective such as suitable to complete the meaning.