Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use the past tense accurately: say “when I was a child,” not “when I was child.” Also, use natural expressions such as “a pink bike” instead of “a bicycle which had a pink color.” The answer has a clear personal detail, but it would be stronger with one additional supporting sentence explaining how you used the bike or how you felt about it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember that my grandfather bought me my first bicycle, which was pink. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school, and I was very excited to have it.

提案: State your opinion in one complete sentence and avoid sentence fragments such as “Because.” Use correct subject–verb agreement: “most Turkish people own a car,” not “most Turkish people has owned their car.” The phrase “typical Turkish people” sounds too general; say “many people in Turkey” instead. Add a linking word such as “because” or “as a result,” and give a specific reason or comparison to make the answer more coherent.

例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in Turkey. Many people prefer to use cars because they are more convenient for long journeys and daily travel. However, cycling is becoming more common among young people and in large cities, where some people ride bikes for exercise.

× Yes, I had a bike when I when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child requires the indefinite article a. The repeated words I when I should also be removed to form a clear sentence.

× My grandfather bought me my bought my first bicycle and which had a pink color.

✓ My grandfather bought me my first bicycle, which was pink.

The phrase my bought my is incorrectly repeated, and and which creates an incomplete and incorrectly connected structure. Use a relative clause with which was to describe the bicycle clearly.

× Because.

✓ This is because most Turkish people own cars and like to go out in them.

Because is a subordinating conjunction and cannot normally stand alone as a complete sentence. It must introduce a dependent clause that is connected to an independent clause.

× Typical Turkish people, most are or I can say most Turkish people has owned their car and who's like to go out with their car.

✓ Most Turkish people own cars and like to go out in them.

The plural subject most Turkish people requires the plural verb own, not has owned. The relative clause who's like is also incorrectly formed; like agrees with the plural subject people. The corrected sentence uses a direct structure without the unnecessary phrase Typical Turkish people, most are.

× Most Turkish people has owned their car and who's like to go out with their car.

✓ Most Turkish people own cars and like to go out in them.

The plural noun people is referring to multiple individuals, so car should be plural: cars. The pronoun them correctly refers to cars.