Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваша відповідь починається прямо й містить конкретні деталі — колір велосипеда, вік і роль батька. Однак є повторення “I was I was”, неприродна фраза “scared of this”, а речення обривається на “my body”, тому відповідь звучить незавершено. Використовуйте чітку структуру: пряма відповідь, коротка причина або опис досвіду та логічне завершення. Замініть “scared of this” на “scared of falling” або “a little nervous”.

例: Yes, I had a blue bike when I was about seven years old. My father taught me how to ride it, and I was initially a little nervous because I was afraid of falling. However, I soon gained confidence and really enjoyed cycling around my neighbourhood.

提案: Ви висловили чітку основну думку та навели причину, але фраза “I think of course” є неприродною, а “to them and for them” — повторюється. Відповідь також обривається, тому її потрібно завершити повним реченням. Використовуйте зв’язок “although” або “because”, а також додайте конкретну деталь, наприклад про міський рух, відстані чи велосипедні доріжки.

例: Bikes are fairly popular in my country, although they are not as common as cars. Many people prefer driving because it is more convenient, especially when they travel long distances or carry heavy things. However, cycling is becoming more popular in large cities because it is cheaper and can help people avoid traffic.

× My father taught me how to ride and I was I was a little bit scared of this but it was an amazing experience and my body

✓ My father taught me how to ride. I was a little bit scared, but it was an amazing experience, and my body was shaking.

ID 26: The phrase “I was I was” repeats the subject and verb, which makes the sentence structurally incorrect. The final phrase, “my body,” is also incomplete because it does not contain a verb. Avoid repeating words and make sure every independent clause has a subject and a verb.

× My father taught me how to ride and I was I was a little bit scared of this but it was an amazing experience and my body

✓ My father taught me how to ride. I was a little bit scared, but it was an amazing experience, and my body was shaking.

ID 23: “My body” is only a noun phrase and does not express a complete idea because it has no verb. Add a suitable verb, such as “was shaking,” to make it a complete sentence or clause.

× It's more convenient to them and for them

✓ It's more convenient for them.

ID 11: The adjective “convenient” is followed by the preposition “for” when describing the person who benefits from something. “To them” is incorrect in this context, and using both expressions is redundant.

× Yeah, I think of course but not as much as it could be because people usually just travel by car here.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular, of course, but not as popular as they could be because people usually just travel by car here.

ID 25: The comparison needs the adjective “popular” after “as” to clearly compare the popularity of bikes. Use the pattern “as + adjective + as” when making this type of comparison.