Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use correct past-tense structures. Say “I wasn’t allowed to ride a bike” instead of “I was not allowed to ride on bike,” and use “my parents were scared” rather than “my parents are scared” because you are talking about your childhood. Avoid repeating “bike” and “ride”; one clear reason is enough.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn’t allow me to ride one. They were worried that I might have an accident, so I usually played indoors instead.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion and connect your contrasting ideas with “however” or “whereas.” Improve grammatical accuracy by saying “in every household” instead of “on every house,” and “many women own bikes” instead of “every female has bikes.” Avoid repeating “now,” “bikes,” and “my country,” and use a specific reason or example to support your answer.

例: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular in my country. In the past, they were less common, especially among women; however, many women now ride them to school or work because they are convenient and inexpensive. This trend is particularly noticeable in larger cities.

× No I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was not allowed to ride on bike and even till my parents are scared to give me the bike to ride.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was not allowed to ride a bike, and even now my parents are scared to let me ride one.

The singular countable noun bike needs an article. Use a bike when referring to a nonspecific bike. Also, after ride, no preposition is needed in the expression ride a bike. The phrase even now is used to refer to the present time.

× No I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was not allowed to ride on bike and even till my parents are scared to give me the bike to ride.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was not allowed to ride a bike, and even now my parents are scared to let me ride one.

The correct expression is ride a bike, not ride on bike. In addition, even now is the appropriate expression for saying that the situation continues at present.

× First bikes were not popular in our country but now bikes are becoming quite popular in my country and every female on every house has now bikes so now they learn it and then they use bikes to go to school or office.

✓ At first, bikes were not popular in our country, but now they are becoming quite popular. Every woman in every household now has a bike, so they learn to ride and use their bikes to go to school or the office.

The expression at first requires the preposition at. Also, use in a household, not on a house, because people live in a household rather than on a house.

× First bikes were not popular in our country but now bikes are becoming quite popular in my country and every female on every house has now bikes so now they learn it and then they use bikes to go to school or office.

✓ At first, bikes were not popular in our country, but now they are becoming quite popular. Every woman in every household now has a bike, so they learn to ride and use their bikes to go to school or the office.

After every, the noun should be singular. Therefore, every woman has a bike is correct, not every female has bikes. The singular form bike matches the singular subject every woman.

× First bikes were not popular in our country but now bikes are becoming quite popular in my country and every female on every house has now bikes so now they learn it and then they use bikes to go to school or office.

✓ At first, bikes were not popular in our country, but now they are becoming quite popular. Every woman in every household now has a bike, so they learn to ride and use their bikes to go to school or the office.

Every refers to individual members one at a time, so it is followed by a singular countable noun and a singular item: every woman has a bike. The combination every woman has bikes is not appropriate in this sentence.

× First bikes were not popular in our country but now bikes are becoming quite popular in my country and every female on every house has now bikes so now they learn it and then they use bikes to go to school or office.

✓ At first, bikes were not popular in our country, but now they are becoming quite popular. Every woman in every household now has a bike, so they learn to ride and use their bikes to go to school or the office.

The singular countable noun bike needs the indefinite article a in a bike. The article the can be used before office when referring to a particular or usual workplace in this context.

× First bikes were not popular in our country but now bikes are becoming quite popular in my country and every female on every house has now bikes so now they learn it and then they use bikes to go to school or office.

✓ At first, bikes were not popular in our country, but now they are becoming quite popular. Every woman in every household now has a bike, so they learn to ride and use their bikes to go to school or the office.

The pronoun it does not clearly or correctly refer to the activity of riding a bike. Use learn to ride, or learn how to ride them, to express the intended meaning clearly.