Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating words such as “funny,” “memorable,” and “two.” Use the correct phrase “learned to ride a bike with two wheels,” rather than “with two heels.” You could make the answer more natural by describing one specific memory and explaining how you felt. Keep the response to two or three clear sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me at a local market, and I remember learning to ride it with two wheels in front of our house. It took me a few days to balance properly, but I felt really proud when I finally managed to ride on my own.

提案: State your opinion clearly and then support it with specific reasons. Use natural expressions such as “bike lanes,” “cycling paths,” and “along the rivers,” instead of “public road for the bike.” Avoid unfinished phrases and unclear references such as “including the from there” and “a big stand.” Organize the answer with a linking word such as “Also” or “For example,” and mention how these facilities encourage people to cycle.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in South Korea, especially in large cities. The government has built many bike lanes and cycling paths along major rivers, including the Han River. As a result, many people ride bikes for exercise, commuting, or simply enjoying the scenery.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and here's the one funny and memorize memorable events that related to my bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and here is one funny and memorable event related to my bike.

The phrase one ... event refers to a single event, so the singular noun event is required instead of events. Use one before a singular countable noun.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and here's the one funny and memorize memorable events that related to my bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and here is one funny and memorable event related to my bike.

Memorize is a verb, but the sentence needs the adjective memorable to describe the event. Also, memorable should be placed directly before the noun it describes.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and here's the one funny and memorize memorable events that related to my bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and here is one funny and memorable event that was related to my bike.

The event was related to the bike, so a passive structure is needed: was related. The past participle related follows the verb was.

× Umm, one day my father bought me a bike in the market and I learned how to ride a bike with two only two heels.

✓ One day, my father bought me a bike at the market, and I learned how to ride it with only two wheels.

The adverb only should be placed immediately before the phrase it limits: only two wheels. This position makes the meaning clear.

× Umm, one day my father bought me a bike in the market and I learned how to ride a bike with two only two heels.

✓ One day, my father bought me a bike at the market, and I learned how to ride it with only two wheels.

At the market is the more natural prepositional phrase when referring to the place where someone buys something. In the market usually emphasizes being inside the market rather than the location of the purchase.

× Uh, especially my country, South Korea is well known for making a public road for the bike, even in the rivers, the big four rivers in our country, including the from they're, they're the kind of a big stand.

✓ In particular, South Korea is well known for building public bike paths, including paths along the country's four major rivers. These paths are quite extensive.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and confusing phrases, such as including the from they're and they're the kind of a big stand. Dividing the idea into two complete sentences creates clear subject-verb structures and makes the meaning easier to understand.

× Uh, especially my country, South Korea is well known for making a public road for the bike, even in the rivers, the big four rivers in our country, including the from they're, they're the kind of a big stand.

✓ In particular, South Korea is well known for building public bike paths, including paths along the country's four major rivers. These paths are quite extensive.

The sentence refers to bike paths in general, so the plural noun paths is more appropriate than the singular phrase a public road. The plural form also agrees with the repeated reference to multiple rivers and paths.