Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use more accurate grammar. Say “I used to have a bike,” not “I used to have bike,” and avoid repeated or unnecessary words such as “I really I was really” and “keen on on.” Use the natural phrase “ride a bike” instead of “ride with that thing,” and explain your interest with one or two specific details. Also, “I was a sporty person” is more natural than “I used to be a sport person.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I was really keen on cycling because I was quite sporty. In fact, I used to ride my bike through the forest every morning during the summer.

提案: Give a clear answer at the beginning, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in Lithuania.” Then support it with logical and specific reasons. Correct “it is really popular thing” to “they are really popular,” and use “there are” instead of “it is” to describe cars and buses. The final sentence is incomplete and unclear; say that cycling can help people avoid traffic and reach their destinations more quickly. Avoid repeating “because of that” and use a linking word such as “Moreover” or “As a result.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Lithuania, especially in larger cities. There are many cars and buses on the roads, so cycling is a convenient way to avoid traffic and reach your destination more quickly. Moreover, many people ride bikes for exercise and environmental reasons.

× When I was a child I used to have bike.

✓ When I was a child, I used to have a bike.

The singular countable noun bike needs the indefinite article a because it refers to one nonspecific bike.

× I really I was really keen on on riding with that thing because I love that I used to be a sport person.

✓ I was really keen on riding it because I loved it, and I used to be a sporty person.

The preposition on should appear only once in the expression keen on. Also, riding it is the correct structure when it refers to the bike; riding with that thing is unnatural here.

× I really I was really keen on on riding with that thing because I love that I used to be a sport person.

✓ I was really keen on riding it because I loved it, and I used to be a sporty person.

The answer describes the speaker's childhood, so love should be changed to the past tense loved.

× I really I was really keen on on riding with that thing because I love that I used to be a sport person.

✓ I was really keen on riding it because I loved it, and I used to be a sporty person.

Sport is normally used as a noun, while sporty is the adjective needed to describe a person.

× So every morning in my childhood I spent on the bike riding across the forest.

✓ So, every morning during my childhood, I spent time riding my bike through the forest.

The verb spend is followed by a period of time, such as spent time riding. Through is more appropriate than across when describing movement within a forest.

× So every morning in my childhood I spent on the bike riding across the forest.

✓ So, every morning during my childhood, I spent time riding my bike through the forest.

The original sentence is missing the noun time after spent. The structure spend time doing something is required.

× Talking about the bike culture in my country, I can say that is really popular thing across Lithuania because it is a lot of cars and buses in that town.

✓ Talking about bike culture in my country, I can say that it is really popular across Lithuania because there are a lot of cars and buses there.

The original sentence is missing the subject it after that. Also, bike culture is an uncountable general idea, so it does not need the article the in this context. The unnecessary phrase a popular thing has also been removed to make the sentence natural.

× Talking about the bike culture in my country, I can say that is really popular thing across Lithuania because it is a lot of cars and buses in that town.

✓ Talking about bike culture in my country, I can say that it is really popular across Lithuania because there are a lot of cars and buses there.

Use there are to introduce the plural noun phrase a lot of cars and buses. It is cannot be used to express the existence of things in this sentence.

× So because of that people will reach where destination faster if we will use.

✓ Because of that, people can get to their destinations faster if they use bikes.

Can expresses the possibility or ability to travel faster. The verb will is not the appropriate choice for this general statement.

× So because of that people will reach where destination faster if we will use.

✓ Because of that, people can get to their destinations faster if they use bikes.

In a first conditional sentence, the if-clause normally uses the present simple, not will. Therefore, use if they use bikes, not if we will use.

× So because of that people will reach where destination faster if we will use.

✓ Because of that, people can get to their destinations faster if they use bikes.

The pronouns are inconsistent in the original sentence: people is followed by we. Use they to refer back to people. Their is also needed before the plural noun destinations.

× So because of that people will reach where destination faster if we will use.

✓ Because of that, people can get to their destinations faster if they use bikes.

The original sentence is incomplete because reach is followed by the incorrect phrase where destination, and use has no object. The structure get to their destinations and use bikes makes the meaning complete and grammatical.