Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use the past tense consistently: say “had” and “was,” not “have.” Improve the sentence structure by saying who bought the bike and when in a clear order. Avoid repetition such as “bought bought” and “when I was.” Use an article before singular countable nouns, for example, “a really cute bicycle.”

例: Yes, I had a really cute bicycle when I was a child. It was pink, and my dad bought it for me on my sixth or seventh birthday. I was very attached to it because it was my first bike.

提案: Give a direct and accurate answer first, because “Not at all” contradicts your later statement that bikes are popular in some Turkish cities. Use subject–verb agreement: “nobody uses bicycles.” Organize the ideas with linking words such as “However” and “For example.” Avoid unclear words like “sties” and “the smaller,” and name a specific place or explain that bicycles are more common in smaller cities.

例: Bikes are not very popular in Turkey overall, especially as a way of commuting. However, they are becoming more common in some smaller cities, such as Eskişehir, where the roads are relatively flat and cycling is convenient. In contrast, many people in larger cities prefer to use cars or public transport.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence refers to a situation in the past, so the past-tense form had is required instead of the present-tense form have.

× It's really cute bicycle.

✓ It was a really cute bicycle.

A singular countable noun such as bicycle requires an article. The indefinite article a is used because the bicycle is being mentioned for the first time.

× It's really cute bicycle.

✓ It was a really cute bicycle.

Because the speaker is describing a bicycle from childhood, the past-tense form was is more appropriate than the present-tense form is.

× It's pink.

✓ It was pink.

The bicycle belonged to the speaker's childhood, so its description should be in the past tense: was.

× My dad bought bought me when my birthday.

✓ My dad bought it for me for my birthday.

The preposition for is needed before the recipient and before the occasion: bought it for me for my birthday. The repeated word bought should also appear only once.

× My dad bought bought me when my birthday.

✓ My dad bought it for me for my birthday.

The pronoun it refers to the bicycle, which is the thing that was bought. The pronoun me identifies the person who received it.

× In Turkey nobody use bicycles when they go somewhere.

✓ In Turkey, nobody uses bicycles when they go somewhere.

Nobody is grammatically singular, so the verb in the present simple must have the third-person singular ending: uses.

× Not at all in Turkey nobody use bicycles when they go somewhere.

✓ Not at all. In Turkey, nobody uses bicycles when they go somewhere.

The original wording joins two complete ideas without suitable punctuation. Separating Not at all into its own sentence makes the structure clear.

× Generally it's popular I think in Europe and in Turkey, maybe in some sties, it's popular like eschichere, like the smaller.

✓ Generally, I think bicycles are popular in Europe and perhaps in some cities in Turkey, such as Eskişehir.

Bicycles is plural, so it should not be referred to with the singular form it is. Use the plural form bicycles are or the pronoun they are.

× Generally it's popular I think in Europe and in Turkey, maybe in some sties, it's popular like eschichere, like the smaller.

✓ Generally, I think bicycles are popular in Europe and perhaps in some cities in Turkey, such as Eskişehir.

The singular pronoun it does not correctly refer to the plural noun bicycles. Use bicycles or they instead.

× Generally it's popular I think in Europe and in Turkey, maybe in some sties, it's popular like eschichere, like the smaller.

✓ Generally, I think bicycles are popular in Europe and perhaps in some cities in Turkey, such as Eskişehir.

The original sentence contains several loosely connected clauses and an incomplete comparison at the end. Organizing the ideas into one clear sentence improves its grammatical structure.