Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，也提供了时间、用途、颜色和价格等细节，但存在明显的时态、搭配和句子连接问题。例如，“I remembered I had the bike”应改为“I remember having a bike”，“During that day”不符合语境，应改为“Back then”或“Every day”。“always ride”应使用过去时“always rode”，“cost me about CN¥40 on it”表达不自然，应说“cost about 40 yuan”。建议使用“because”或“also”连接细节，并避免把多个信息堆在一个过长的句子中。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in junior high school. I rode it to school every day because it was convenient. It was a pink bike and cost about 40 yuan. I really liked it because it gave me more independence.

提案: 回答尝试进行年龄对比，这是一个好的思路，但观点没有完整表达，最后一句难以理解。应先明确回答“bikes are popular”，然后分别说明学生和成年人的情况。注意语法： “depends on what the age the people is”应改为“depends on people’s age”；“reduce to face many construction”不符合英语表达，可以改为“avoid traffic congestion”或“avoid traffic jams”。建议使用“while”连接对比，并补充成年人的具体情况，例如成年人可能骑共享单车通勤或更倾向于开车。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, although this depends on people’s age. Many students ride bikes to school because they are convenient and help them avoid traffic jams. Adults also use shared bikes for short journeys, but some prefer to drive or take public transport to work.

× Yes, I remembered I had the bike when I was in my junior high school.

✓ Yes, I remember having a bike when I was in junior high school.

这里是在回答现在的记忆，因此主句应使用一般现在时 remember，而不是过去时 remembered。描述过去拥有自行车的经历时，可以使用 remember having a bike。

× Yes, I remembered I had the bike when I was in my junior high school.

✓ Yes, I remember having a bike when I was in junior high school.

第一次提到自行车时，听者并不知道是哪一辆，所以应使用不定冠词 a，而不是定冠词 the。

× During that day I always ride a bike to school and it's a pink bike and it really cost me about CN¥40 on it.

✓ During that time, I always rode a pink bike to school, and it cost me about CN¥40.

这句话描述童年时期的习惯，应使用一般过去时：ride 改为 rode，is 改为 was。cost 的过去式仍然是 cost。句子中不需要重复说 a pink bike 和 it's a pink bike。

× During that day I always ride a bike to school and it's a pink bike and it really cost me about CN¥40 on it.

✓ During that time, I always rode a pink bike to school, and it cost me about CN¥40.

动词 cost 后面直接接人和价格，不能使用 on。正确结构是 cost someone some money，例如：It cost me CN¥40。

× I really like it.

✓ I really liked it.

前文讲的是童年时期的自行车，因此这里也应使用一般过去时 liked，使整段叙述的时态保持一致。

× Well, I think it depends on what the age the people is.

✓ Well, I think it depends on people's ages.

what the age the people is 的结构不正确。表达“取决于人们的年龄”时，可以直接使用所有格 people's 加复数名词 ages。

× Well, I think it depends on what the age the people is.

✓ Well, I think it depends on people's ages.

people 是复数名词，不能和单数动词 is 搭配。若保留动词结构，应使用 people are；本句改成 people's ages 后可以避免这个主谓一致问题。

× It's so convenient it can help you reduce to face many construction while for adults think they like.

✓ It's so convenient that it can help you avoid facing a lot of construction, while adults may prefer other forms of transportation.

so...that...结构中需要使用 that 连接两个分句；while 后面也需要完整的主语和谓语。原句中的 reduce to face 和 for adults think they like 结构不完整，导致句子难以理解。

× It's so convenient it can help you reduce to face many construction while for adults think they like.

✓ It's so convenient that it can help you avoid facing a lot of construction, while adults may prefer other forms of transportation.

avoid 后面应接动名词形式，即 avoid facing，不能说 avoid to face。建议记住：avoid、enjoy、finish 等动词后通常接动词-ing形式。

× It's so convenient it can help you reduce to face many construction while for adults think they like.

✓ It's so convenient that it can help you avoid facing a lot of construction, while adults may prefer other forms of transportation.

construction 在这里通常作不可数名词使用，不能用 many 修饰。应使用 a lot of construction，或者说 many construction projects。