Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well-developed. You directly answer the question and provide specific details about how you used your tricycle. However, “I remember I had a tricycle” would sound more natural as “I remember having a tricycle,” and “go anywhere I wanted to” is slightly repetitive after mentioning the local shop and neighbours. Use a more natural linking phrase such as “It also made me feel independent.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bicycle, but I remember having a tricycle. I used to ride it to the local shop or to visit my neighbours. It also made me feel independent because I could travel around my neighbourhood by myself.

提案: You answer the question directly, but the response contains several grammar and repetition problems, including “male males,” “and and,” “females are ride,” and “in comparison.” Avoid repeating “common and popular”; one word is enough. Also, express the comparison more naturally and explain why there may be a difference, for example, by mentioning social attitudes, safety, or practical reasons. Use “men” and “women” rather than “male males” and “females” in this context.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among men. Women also ride bikes, but they do so less frequently in some areas because of safety concerns and traditional attitudes. However, cycling is becoming more common among people of all ages.

× Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only male males ride bikes and and females are ride bikes less and incomparison.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only males ride bikes, and females ride bikes less often by comparison.

Male is an adjective, while males is the plural noun needed to refer to men. The phrase male males unnecessarily repeats the same idea. Use males when the word functions as the subject of the sentence.

× Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only male males ride bikes and and females are ride bikes less and incomparison.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only males ride bikes, and females ride bikes less often by comparison.

The conjunction and is repeated in and and. Use the conjunction only once to connect the two clauses. Avoid repeating conjunctions when joining ideas.

× Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only male males ride bikes and and females are ride bikes less and incomparison.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only males ride bikes, and females ride bikes less often by comparison.

The sentence describes a general situation, so use the simple present tense. After the subject females, use ride, not are ride. Are must be followed by a present participle, such as riding, but riding is not needed here.

× Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only male males ride bikes and and females are ride bikes less and incomparison.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country, but only males ride bikes, and females ride bikes less often by comparison.

The expression incomparison is incorrect because the words must be separated, and by comparison is more natural in this sentence. Also, use the phrase less often to compare how frequently females ride bikes.