Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawapan anda menjawab soalan dengan jelas dan memberikan perkembangan yang menarik tentang cara anda belajar menunggang basikal. Namun, frasa “practiced using a tricycle” kurang natural; gunakan “learned to ride a tricycle”. Ayat kedua terlalu panjang dan susunan “from having four wheels to three wheels and to only two wheels” boleh dipermudah supaya lebih lancar. Gunakan kata penghubung seperti “then” atau “eventually” dan elakkan pengulangan “used to”.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I first learned to ride a tricycle, then moved on to a bike with training wheels before finally riding a two-wheeler. I managed to do this in about three months, so I thought I was quite talented at cycling.

提案: Jawapan anda mempunyai pendapat yang jelas dan memberikan sebab yang relevan tentang kelestarian alam sekitar. Walau bagaimanapun, terdapat pengulangan dan kesilapan tatabahasa dalam “we are going we are developing” serta “renewable renewable”. Frasa “renewable energy powered vehicles” kurang tepat dalam konteks basikal kerana basikal biasanya tidak menggunakan tenaga boleh diperbaharui secara langsung. Elakkan mengulang idea “popular” dan gunakan contoh khusus seperti penggunaan basikal untuk perjalanan pendek, kesesakan lalu lintas atau laluan basikal yang dibina kerajaan.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. The government is promoting cycling as a cleaner alternative to driving, and many cities are building dedicated bike lanes. People often use bicycles for short trips because they are affordable and can help reduce traffic congestion and air pollution.

× This is because in my country we are going we are developing towards a more sustainable environment and the government has been encouraging everyone to switch from fossil fuel powered vehicles to renewable renewable energy powered vehicles.

✓ This is because, in my country, we are developing toward a more sustainable environment, and the government has been encouraging everyone to switch from fossil fuel powered vehicles to renewable renewable energy powered vehicles.

The phrase 'we are going we are developing' contains two overlapping verb phrases, which creates an incorrect sentence structure. Use only one complete verb phrase, such as 'we are developing.' The commas also help separate the introductory phrase and the two coordinated clauses.

× So I think it is very popular nowadays.

✓ So I think they are very popular nowadays.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but it refers to 'bikes,' which is plural. Use the plural pronoun 'they' and the plural verb 'are' to maintain agreement with 'bikes.'