Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，但存在较多语法和用词问题。首先要使用过去时，例如用“I didn’t have”而不是“I don’t have”；“in my small time”和“in my smooth”表达不自然，可以改为“when I was young”或“when I was a child”。此外，“choose study to how to ride”应改为“learned how to ride”。建议先直接回答，再补充一个原因，控制在2—3句，并避免重复“I didn’t have a bike”。

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I never learned how to ride one because I had trouble keeping my balance. As a result, I usually walked or took the bus instead.

提案: 回答观点明确，也提供了便利、便宜和环保三个理由，内容较充实。但需要注意主谓一致和名词单复数：应说“Bikes are popular”或“It is popular”，而不是混用；“everybody go”应改为“everybody goes”，“my countries”应改为“my country”。“bike is convenient and will not spend too much time”表达不自然，可改为“bikes are convenient and save time”；“keep environment good”应改为“protect the environment”。建议减少重复使用“because”和“popular”，用“also”或“in addition”连接理由。

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people ride them to school or work because they are convenient, inexpensive, and environmentally friendly. In addition, bikes can help people avoid traffic jams and stay fit.

× No I don't have cause in my small time I don't have the balance so I never choose study to how to ride the bike. So I don't have a bike in my smooth but my small time.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't have good balance, so I never chose to study how to ride a bike. I didn't have a bike during my childhood.

问题描述的是童年时期的经历，所以应该使用一般过去时。 “don't have”应改为“didn't have”，“choose”应改为过去式“chose”。

× No I don't have cause in my small time I don't have the balance so I never choose study to how to ride the bike. So I don't have a bike in my smooth but my small time.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't have good balance, so I never chose to study how to ride a bike. I didn't have a bike during my childhood.

“in my small time”和“in my smooth”中的介词和表达方式不正确。表示“在我小时候”应使用“when I was a child”或“during my childhood”。

× No I don't have cause in my small time I don't have the balance so I never choose study to how to ride the bike. So I don't have a bike in my smooth but my small time.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't have good balance, so I never chose to study how to ride a bike. I didn't have a bike during my childhood.

“small time”和“smooth”不能正确表达“小时候”。可以使用“when I was a child”或“during my childhood”。另外，“the balance”在这里通常说“good balance”更自然。

× No I don't have cause in my small time I don't have the balance so I never choose study to how to ride the bike. So I don't have a bike in my smooth but my small time.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't have good balance, so I never chose to study how to ride a bike. I didn't have a bike during my childhood.

原句把多个意思直接连接在一起，缺少清晰的句子结构。“choose”后面应接“to do”，所以应说“chose to study how to ride a bike”。建议把原因、结果和总结分别组织清楚。

× Yes, it's really popular in my countries 'cause everybody go to school or go to work well by bike because bike is convenient and will not spend too much time and it's cheap and it's we can keep environment good. That's why it's really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because everybody goes to school or work by bike. Bikes are convenient, do not take too much time, are cheap, and help us protect the environment. That's why they are really popular in my country.

“my countries”表示多个国家，但这里指自己的一个国家，所以应改为“my country”。谈论自行车这一类事物时，应使用复数“bikes”，并搭配“are”。

× Yes, it's really popular in my countries 'cause everybody go to school or go to work well by bike because bike is convenient and will not spend too much time and it's cheap and it's we can keep environment good. That's why it's really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because everybody goes to school or work by bike. Bikes are convenient, do not take too much time, are cheap, and help us protect the environment. That's why they are really popular in my country.

“everybody”虽然表示很多人，但语法上属于第三人称单数，因此动词要加“-s”。“go”应改为“goes”。

× Yes, it's really popular in my countries 'cause everybody go to school or go to work well by bike because bike is convenient and will not spend too much time and it's cheap and it's we can keep environment good. That's why it's really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because everybody goes to school or work by bike. Bikes are convenient, do not take too much time, are cheap, and help us protect the environment. That's why they are really popular in my country.

“it's”是“it is”或“it has”的缩写，不能指代复数名词“bikes”。指代“bikes”时应使用复数代词“they”，或者直接重复使用“bikes”。

× Yes, it's really popular in my countries 'cause everybody go to school or go to work well by bike because bike is convenient and will not spend too much time and it's cheap and it's we can keep environment good. That's why it's really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because everybody goes to school or work by bike. Bikes are convenient, do not take too much time, are cheap, and help us protect the environment. That's why they are really popular in my country.

这里是在描述自行车的一般特点，不是在谈将来会发生的事情，所以不应使用“will not spend”。应使用一般现在时“do not take too much time”。注意英语中通常说交通工具“take time”，而不是“spend time”。

× Yes, it's really popular in my countries 'cause everybody go to school or go to work well by bike because bike is convenient and will not spend too much time and it's cheap and it's we can keep environment good. That's why it's really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because everybody goes to school or work by bike. Bikes are convenient, do not take too much time, are cheap, and help us protect the environment. That's why they are really popular in my country.

原句连续使用多个“because”和“and”，并且“it's we can”结构错误，导致句子连接混乱。建议用“because”引出原因，并用逗号和“and”有条理地列出自行车的优点。

× Yes, it's really popular in my countries 'cause everybody go to school or go to work well by bike because bike is convenient and will not spend too much time and it's cheap and it's we can keep environment good. That's why it's really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because everybody goes to school or work by bike. Bikes are convenient, do not take too much time, are cheap, and help us protect the environment. That's why they are really popular in my country.

“environment”在这里指我们共同生活的自然环境，是特指概念，因此前面需要加定冠词“the”，应说“the environment”。