Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then explain the problem clearly. The phrase “someone's tall and that” is unclear; say that you outgrew your bikes quickly. Also, use the past tense consistently: “got” instead of “get,” and “gave up buying” instead of “gave up to buy.” Avoid repeating “bike” unnecessarily and connect your ideas with “because” or “so.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I outgrew my bikes quite quickly because I was growing fast. As a result, I eventually stopped buying new ones.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, I think bikes are quite popular.” Then support it with a specific reason or example, such as the availability of bike-sharing services. Avoid repetition of “people” and “public bikes,” use “them” instead of “that,” and complete your final sentence. Explain why you have never used a public bike rather than ending with “because I have to.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. There are many public bike-sharing schemes, so people use them for short trips and commuting. I have never used one myself because I usually travel by bus or subway.

× Every time I get a new bike...

✓ Every time I got a new bike...

The question asks about your childhood, so you should use the past tense. Change get to got because this event happened repeatedly in the past.

× I gave up to buy a new bike.

✓ I gave up buying a new bike.

The verb give up is followed by a gerund, or verb + -ing form, not to + verb. Therefore, use buying instead of to buy.

× Every time I get a new bike someone's tall and that So eventually I gave up to buy a new bike.

✓ Every time I got a new bike, someone stole it, so eventually I gave up buying a new bike.

The phrase someone's tall and that is not a grammatically complete or meaningful expression in this context. The sentence needs a clear subject and verb, such as someone stole it. Also, use so to show the result of this repeated problem.

× There are public bikes a lot of public bikes.

✓ There are many public bikes.

Use many with countable plural nouns such as bikes. The phrase a lot of public bikes is possible in some contexts, but it is incorrectly placed after there are in the original sentence. Many public bikes is clearer and more grammatical here.

× People use that a lot. I've never used that.

✓ People use them a lot. I've never used them.

Bikes is a plural countable noun, so it should be replaced by the plural object pronoun them, not the singular demonstrative pronoun that.