Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense because the question asks about your childhood: use “Yes, I did.” Avoid repeating “I remember” and “it was,” and combine the description more naturally. Add one specific detail, such as how often you used the bike or where you rode it. Keep the answer to two or three clear sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. It was quite simple, but I really enjoyed using it to play with my friends.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country.” Replace “for in fact” with “in fact,” and say “children rode bikes” instead of “children play bikes.” The phrase “in our livelihood” is unnatural in this context; use “in my neighborhood” or “in my community.” Support your opinion with a specific reason or comparison, and connect the ideas with “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. In fact, when I was young, many children in my neighborhood rode their bikes to school or played with them in the park. They were affordable and convenient, so most families could buy one.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about having a bike in the past, so the answer should use the past tense had, not the present-tense form do have. When answering questions about childhood experiences, use past-tense verbs such as had, rode, and played.

× When I was a child I remember it, it was red and it had two wheels and it was small.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, my bike was red, had two wheels, and was small.

The original sentence incorrectly joins two independent clauses with a comma, creating a run-on sentence. The structure is clearer when that introduces the remembered information and the repeated subject and verb are omitted from the list. Use commas after introductory clauses such as when I was a child.

× I think bikes are very popular in our country for in fact when I was a child I remember many children play bikes in our livelihood.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in our country because, in fact, when I was a child, many children rode bikes in our neighborhood.

For in fact is not a correct conjunction combination in this sentence. Because correctly introduces the reason, while in fact is an adverbial expression that should be set off with commas. Use because to explain why you think bikes are popular.

× I think bikes are very popular in our country for in fact when I was a child I remember many children play bikes in our livelihood.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in our country because, in fact, when I was a child, many children rode bikes in our neighborhood.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a past time, so the verb should be in the past tense. Rode is the past tense of ride and is the correct verb for using a bike. Do not use the present-tense form play when describing a past experience.