Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời đi đúng trọng tâm và có thêm lý do cũng như thói quen sử dụng xe đạp. Tuy nhiên, cần dùng thì quá khứ vì câu hỏi nói về thời thơ ấu: “have” nên đổi thành “had”, “feel” nên đổi thành “felt” hoặc dùng “enjoyed”. Ngoài ra, nói “at the weekend” hoặc “on weekends” thay vì “in the weekend”, và nên dùng “friends” nếu nói chung. Hãy nối các ý bằng từ như “because” để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike for my birthday, and I was really happy to have it. I usually rode it with my friends on weekends, especially in the park near my house.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý kiến rõ ràng nhưng mắc nhiều lỗi về từ vựng, ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu. “Pie” cần sửa thành “bike” hoặc “bikes”; “not only my country but also over the world” nên diễn đạt là “not only in my country but also around the world”; “is very by everyone” cần sửa thành “are popular among people”. Cụm “rides a bike have improved health and relax” nên đổi thành “riding bikes improves people’s health and helps them relax”. Nên trả lời bằng cấu trúc đơn giản gồm ý kiến, lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. They are a convenient and affordable way to travel, and riding a bike can improve people’s health and help them relax. Many people also use bicycles to avoid traffic jams.

× Of course I have one, my father bought it for me on my birthday.

✓ Of course, I had one. My father bought it for me on my birthday.

The question asks about your childhood, so the past tense had is required instead of the present tense have.

× Of course I have one, my father bought it for me on my birthday.

✓ Of course, I had one. My father bought it for me on my birthday.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Separate them into two sentences to avoid a comma splice.

× I feel nice to ride my bike with my friend.

✓ I felt happy when I rode my bike with my friend.

Because you are describing a childhood experience, the verbs should be in the past tense: felt and rode.

× I usually ride my bike in the weekend.

✓ I usually rode my bike on the weekend.

Use the preposition on with weekend, not in. The verb rode is also used because the answer refers to your childhood.

× I think not only my country but also over the world, the pie is very by everyone because rides a bike have improved health and relax.

✓ I think bikes are popular not only in my country but also around the world because riding a bike improves health and helps people relax.

With the structure not only... but also..., the preposition in must be repeated before my country, and the phrase should be not only in my country but also around the world. This creates a clear and parallel sentence structure.

× I think not only my country but also over the world, the pie is very by everyone because rides a bike have improved health and relax.

✓ I think bikes are popular not only in my country but also around the world because riding a bike improves health and helps people relax.

The correct fixed expression is around the world, which requires the definite article the. The original phrase over the world is not appropriate in this context.

× I think not only my country but also over the world, the pie is very by everyone because rides a bike have improved health and relax.

✓ I think bikes are popular not only in my country but also around the world because riding a bike improves health and helps people relax.

When a verb functions as the subject of a clause, use the gerund form riding. Riding a bike is the activity that improves health and helps people relax.

× I think not only my country but also over the world, the pie is very by everyone because rides a bike have improved health and relax.

✓ I think bikes are popular not only in my country but also around the world because riding a bike improves health and helps people relax.

The plural subject bikes takes are, while the singular gerund subject riding a bike takes improves. The verb relax should be changed to helps people relax so that the sentence has a complete and grammatically correct structure.