Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你直接回答了“没有”，并补充了姐姐有自行车这一细节，基本结构是清楚的。不过，句子在“so I'm very umm”处中断，且“learn how to”后面缺少动词，表达不完整。可以说“learn how to ride one”。建议使用“but”和“because”等连接词，把原因和感受连贯地表达出来；同时避免过多犹豫词。答案控制在2—3句即可。

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, but my sister had one. I often watched her ride it, so I really wanted to learn how to ride a bike. Unfortunately, I never had the chance to learn.

提案: 你给出了肯定回答，也尝试比较过去和现在，但后半部分严重不完整，影响了意思表达。“every adults”应改为“almost every adult”，“read back”应改为“rode bikes”，“after years”可以改为“as they got older”。建议先用主题句直接回答，再用“when I was a child”和“nowadays”进行清晰对比，并补充一个具体原因或例子。避免重复“every”“and”“recently”等词，答案应完整结束。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and people who want to exercise. When I was a child, many adults rode bikes to work, but as they got older, some of them switched to cars. Nowadays, cycling is becoming popular again because it is healthy and environmentally friendly.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my sister had one so I'm very umm.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my sister had one, so I really wanted to learn how to ride one.

问题发生在过去，前面使用了过去时“didn't have”和“had”，所以“I'm”应改为过去时“wanted”。另外，“I'm very umm”不是完整、正确的表达；这里可用“I really wanted to learn how to ride one”表达“我当时很想学骑自行车”。

× I really want to learn how to.

✓ I really wanted to learn how to ride one.

“learn how to”后面通常需要接具体动作。“how to”后缺少动词，因此句子不完整。应补充“ride one”，表示“学会骑自行车”。由于谈论的是童年经历，使用过去时“wanted”更合适。

× my parents and almost every every adults read back to go to work

✓ My parents and almost every adult rode bikes to work.

“every”后面必须接单数可数名词，所以“every adults”应改为“every adult”。同时，重复的“every”应删除。这里“rode bikes to work”是正确表达，意思是“骑自行车上班”。

× my parents and almost every every adults read back to go to work and and after years when they have cars.

✓ My parents and almost every adult rode bikes to work, but after a few years, they had cars.

这段内容描述过去的情况，因此“have”应改为过去时“had”。“rode”是“ride”的过去式，适合表达过去骑车上班。描述过去的一段时间时，可以使用“after a few years”，比“after years”更自然。

× my parents and almost every every adults read back to go to work and and after years when they have cars.

✓ My parents and almost every adult rode bikes to work, but after a few years, they had cars.

“and and”是连词重复使用，应删除一个。这里前后内容有转折关系：以前骑自行车，后来有了汽车，所以使用“but”比“and”更准确。

× But recent recent recently.

✓ But recently, bikes have become popular again.

原句只有副词“recently”，没有谓语动词，因此不是完整句子。应补充“bikes have become popular again”，完整表达“但是最近自行车又变得流行起来”。