Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear yes/no statement. Use the past tense because the question refers to your childhood: “I had a bike” or “I didn’t have a bike.” The phrase “when I was in a child” is incorrect; say “when I was a child.” Add one brief supporting detail, such as who bought the bike or how often you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about seven, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: Your answer gives a clear opinion, but some phrases are difficult to understand and contain repetition. Say “Bikes are a symbol of freedom and peace” instead of “the bike has the symbol of picnic and peace,” and use “teach their children how to ride” instead of “teach the way to take the bike.” Develop your answer with one specific reason or example, and connect ideas with linking words such as “because,” “also,” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. They are a symbol of freedom because people can use them to travel around their neighborhoods easily. Also, many parents teach their children how to ride a bike from a young age.

× I have to buy when I was in a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about a past experience, so the past-tense form had is needed instead of the present-tense form have. Use had to describe possession in the past.

× I have to buy when I was in a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

We do not use in before child in this expression. The natural phrase is when I was a child.

× I have to buy when I was in a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a because it refers to one child in a general life-stage expression. The correct phrase is a child.

× The bike has the, the symbol of picnic and peace in the country.

✓ Bikes are symbols of picnics and peace in my country.

The statement refers to bikes in general, so the plural noun Bikes is more appropriate. The noun symbol also needs to be plural because bikes represent more than one symbol or represent these ideas generally.

× A lot of parents teach the, the way to take the bike to their child's and then we can, yeah.

✓ A lot of parents teach their children how to ride bikes.

The phrase their child's incorrectly uses a singular possessive form. Since parents usually teach more than one child, use the plural noun children. Also, bikes is appropriate when speaking about bikes generally.

× A lot of parents teach the, the way to take the bike to their child's and then we can, yeah.

✓ A lot of parents teach their children how to ride bikes.

The original sentence has an incomplete and unnatural structure after teach. Use the pattern teach someone how to do something: teach their children how to ride bikes. Avoid repeated words and the unfinished phrase and then we can in the final answer.