Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 「子どもの頃」を表すには過去形を使い、現在形の “I have” ではなく “I had” と言いましょう。また、“that when I'm when I'm a child” は不自然で、 “when I was a child” に置き換えます。まず “Yes, I did.” と質問に直接答え、その後にバイクの種類や使った目的などの具体的な情報を1〜2文で加えると、より自然で効果的です。

例: Yes, I did. I had a dirt bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: 質問に対して、まず “Yes, I think they are quite popular in my country.” のように直接答えましょう。“the popular” や “became the popular” は文法的に誤っているため、形容詞 “popular” をそのまま使います。さらに、通勤・運動・環境保護など、人気の理由を1つ具体的に説明し、 “especially” や “because” などの linking words でつなぐと、内容が明確になります。繰り返しや言いよどみを減らし、2〜3文で簡潔に答えましょう。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. They are especially common among young people and commuters because they are affordable and environmentally friendly. Many people also ride them for exercise.

× Yeah, and I have a dirt bike that when I'm when I'm a child.

✓ Yeah, I had a dirt bike when I was a child.

Because the question asks about the past, use the past tense: had instead of have and was instead of am. The repeated words and the unnecessary that are removed to make the sentence clear.

× Yeah, and I have a dirt bike that when I'm when I'm a child.

✓ Yeah, I had a dirt bike when I was a child.

The original sentence has an incomplete and confusing structure. Use the complete pattern subject + verb + object + when-clause: I had a dirt bike when I was a child.

× Yes, yes, I I feel like the the popular I became the popular and and and in my country.

✓ Yes, I feel like bikes are popular in my country.

Popular is an adjective, so it should describe the subject bikes after the verb are. The expression the popular is incorrect here because popular is not being used as a noun.

× Yes, yes, I I feel like the the popular I became the popular and and and in my country.

✓ Yes, I feel like bikes are popular in my country.

The original sentence does not form a complete, logical sentence. Use the structure I feel like + subject + be + adjective: I feel like bikes are popular in my country. Avoid repeated words such as yes, I, the, and, and and.