Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer responds directly and includes a clear supporting detail. However, the two independent clauses should not be joined with only a comma. Use a full stop or a linking word such as “and.” You could also add a specific detail about where you used the bike to make your answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I used it almost every day. I usually rode it to school and around my neighborhood because it was fun and convenient.

提案: You give a direct opinion and a reason, but “it” should be “them” because “bikes” is plural, and “save our money” is less natural than “save money.” Also, avoid combining “because” and “so” in the same cause-and-effect structure. Add a specific example, such as commuting or avoiding traffic, to develop your answer.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because people use them for transportation and to save money. For example, many students and office workers cycle to school or work instead of paying for public transport. Bikes are also useful for avoiding traffic in crowded cities.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, I used it every day.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I used it every day.

The original sentence contains a comma splice: two independent clauses are joined only by a comma. Use the conjunction 'and' to connect the clauses correctly. You can also separate them into two sentences.

× In our country, yes, bikes are popular because we use it for transportation so we could save our money.

✓ In our country, bikes are popular because we use them for transportation, so we can save money.

The plural noun 'bikes' requires the plural pronoun 'them', not the singular pronoun 'it'. Use 'can' rather than 'could' because the sentence describes a general present benefit. The phrase 'save money' is more natural than 'save our money' in this general statement.

× In our country, yes, bikes are popular because we use it for transportation so we could save our money.

✓ In our country, bikes are popular because we use them for transportation, so we can save money.

The sentence describes a general situation in the present, so the modal verb 'can' is appropriate. 'Could' usually expresses past ability, possibility, or a more uncertain situation. Use 'can' for a present ability or benefit.