Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，也提供了自行车的用途和损坏这一具体细节，但时态错误较多，影响准确性和自然度。谈论童年经历时，应统一使用一般过去时，例如将“have”改为“had”，“I'm”改为“I was”，“ride”改为“rode”。此外，“so I don't use. I didn't use that anymore”重复且表达不完整，可以改为“so I stopped using it”。建议先直接回答，再用“because”或“but”补充原因和结果，控制在2—3句话内。

例: Yes, I had a fancy bike when I was a child, and I really liked it. I rode it to school every day, but it broke when I started high school, so I stopped using it.

提案: 回答观点明确，并给出了环保和交通拥堵两个理由，内容较具体。不过，“MMM But”不够自然；“bikes”是复数，后面应使用“They are”，而不是“It is”；“everybody just ride”应改为“many people ride”或“everybody rides”。“today”容易让人理解为“今天”，如果想表达当前情况，可以使用“nowadays”或“these days”。建议用“because”连接第一个理由，用“Besides”或“Another reason is that”引出第二个理由，并避免绝对化表达“everybody”。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. They are environmentally friendly, and many people use them because the roads are often crowded with cars. Besides, cycling is a convenient way to get around when the streets are narrow.

× I have a fancy bike when I'm a child and I liked it very much and I ride it to school every day, but it broke when I went to high school so I don't use. I didn't use that anymore.

✓ I had a fancy bike when I was a child, and I liked it very much. I rode it to school every day, but it broke when I went to high school, so I didn't use it anymore.

这段话描述的是童年时期的经历，因此应该使用一般过去时。have 要改为 had，am 要改为 was，ride 要改为 rode，don't use 要改为 didn't use。注意，use 后面需要接代词 it，表示“不再使用它”。

× so I don't use.

✓ so I didn't use it anymore.

动词 use 后面缺少宾语。这里的“自行车”已经在前文提到过，所以应使用代词 it 指代 bike。另外，因为整段是在讲过去的经历，don't 也应改为 didn't。

× so everybody just ride bikes today.

✓ so everybody just rides bikes today.

Everybody 虽然表示“所有人”，但语法上属于第三人称单数，因此一般现在时中后面的动词要加 -s。ride 应改为 rides。