Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Відповідь безпосередньо відповідає на запитання, але є значні граматичні помилки та незрозумілі фрази. Використовуйте минулий час: “I had”, “my sister had”, “I took”. Також уникайте вставних слів і додайте чітку конкретну деталь про те, де або як ви каталися. Побудуйте відповідь у такому порядку: пряма відповідь, пояснення та короткий особистий спогад.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bicycle when I was 12, although my sister had one before me, so I sometimes borrowed hers. I usually rode around my neighbourhood with my friends, and I really enjoyed it.

提案: Основна думка зрозуміла, але відповідь містить повтори, незавершені фрази та неправильні конструкції. Скажіть “Bikes are very popular” замість “bike so popular” і використовуйте порівняння “cheaper and more convenient than taking a car or public transport”. Додайте один конкретний приклад, наприклад, для поїздок до магазину чи школи, і використайте зв’язку “because” або “as a result”.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in small villages like mine. They are convenient and much cheaper than using a car or public transport, so people often cycle to nearby shops, schools, and neighbours’ houses.

× When I was 12 years old, girl, I have a bicycle.

✓ When I was 12 years old, I had a bicycle.

The question asks about a past childhood experience, so the past tense had is required instead of the present-tense form have. When describing past experiences, check that the main verbs consistently use the past tense.

× When I was 12 years old, girl, I have a bicycle.

✓ When I was a 12-year-old girl, I had a bicycle.

The singular countable noun girl needs the indefinite article a. The phrase 12-year-old comes before girl as a compound adjective. Use a or an before a singular countable noun when referring to one non-specific person or thing.

× But previous year, uh, bicycle had just my sister.

✓ But the previous year, the bicycle belonged only to my sister.

The expression previous year normally refers to a specific year in the past, so it needs the definite article the. The bicycle also refers to a specific bicycle already mentioned, so it needs the. Use the when both the speaker and listener can identify the noun.

× Bicycle had just my sister.

✓ The bicycle belonged only to my sister.

The structure bicycle had my sister is not grammatical for expressing ownership. Use belonged to or was my sister's to show possession. Make sure the sentence contains a clear subject, verb, and complement.

× Sometimes I take her bicycle when I wanted to ride around my home.

✓ Sometimes I took her bicycle when I wanted to ride around my home.

The sentence describes a repeated action in the past, so take should be changed to the past form took. When telling a childhood story, use the past tense consistently for completed or repeated past actions.

× Bike so popular in my region.

✓ Bikes are so popular in my region.

The statement refers to bicycles in general, so the plural noun bikes is more appropriate than the singular form bike. Use a plural noun when making a general statement about a whole category.

× Bike so popular in my region.

✓ Bikes are so popular in my region.

The plural subject bikes must be followed by the plural verb are. A complete sentence with the verb be requires the correct form of be: is for a singular subject and are for a plural subject.

× Bikes are much expensive.

✓ Bikes are much cheaper.

When comparing bicycles with another means of transportation, use the comparative form cheaper. The word much can modify a comparative adjective, as in much cheaper. Do not use much expensive to express that something costs less; use much cheaper instead.

× Than bike or, or much expensive, umm, a cheap.

✓ Bicycles are also much cheaper than other forms of transportation.

The original phrase is incomplete and does not contain a clear subject and verb. A complete comparison should include the subject, the comparative adjective, and the comparison object. For example, Bicycles are cheaper than other forms of transportation.