Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use the past tense consistently: “had” instead of “have.” Also, say “riding my bike” rather than “playing it,” because we ride a bike. Add one specific detail, such as where you rode it or how often, to make the answer more developed and natural.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I really enjoyed riding it. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends after school. It was a simple bike, but I have many happy memories of using it.

提案: Improve subject–verb agreement and sentence structure: use “they are used” instead of “it use.” Say “to travel from home to school or work” rather than “from our house, going to school or going to work.” Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason or example. Avoid switching between “my country” and “our house.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient means of transportation. Many people use them to travel from home to school or work, especially in cities with heavy traffic. They are also environmentally friendly, so more people are choosing them nowadays.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and enjoyed playing it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and enjoyed playing it.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a finished period in the past, so the past tense had is required instead of the present perfect form have. Use the simple past when describing possession or events that happened during a completed past period.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it use as a mode of transportation from our house, going to school or going to work.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are used as a mode of transportation for traveling from home to school or work.

The noun bikes is plural, so it must be replaced by the plural pronoun they, not the singular pronoun it. Make sure pronouns agree with the nouns they refer to in number.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it use as a mode of transportation from our house, going to school or going to work.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are used as a mode of transportation for traveling from home to school or work.

The bikes receive the action of using, so the passive voice is needed: are used. In the present passive, use the structure subject + am/is/are + past participle. Also, used is the past participle of use.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it use as a mode of transportation from our house, going to school or going to work.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are used as a mode of transportation for traveling from home to school or work.

The preposition for is more appropriate before traveling because it shows the purpose of using bicycles. The phrase from home to school or work clearly expresses the starting point and destination. Avoid using a series of less-connected phrases after transportation.