Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly with “Yes, I did” and then explain when or how you got the bike. Correct the grammar and word order: say “I had one when I was a child” instead of “I had when I was a child,” and “It was a gift from my parents for my birthday” instead of “I was had a gift.” Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases such as “Uh is my by.”

例: Yes, I did. I had one when I was a child, and it was a gift from my parents for my birthday. I was really excited because I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence: “Yes, bikes are quite popular in Vietnam.” Use the correct verb “ride,” not “rise,” and say “people of all ages” instead of “every age.” Explain how bikes are used in daily life and connect your ideas with a linking word such as “because” or “especially.” Reduce repeated hesitations and avoid the unclear phrase “to daily routine.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Vietnam. People of all ages ride them, especially for short trips to school, work, or local markets. They are convenient and affordable, so they remain part of many people’s daily routines.

× Yes, I had when I I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The verb had needs a direct object, such as a bike. The pronoun I is also repeated unnecessarily. Use the complete structure subject + had + object + time clause.

× I was had a gift.

✓ It was a gift.

Was had is not a correct verb combination here. Use it was to identify the gift. If you want to describe how you received it, you can say, I was given a bike as a gift.

× Uh is my by in my birthday from my parents.

✓ It was my birthday gift from my parents.

The preposition in is incorrect before birthday in this phrase. The natural expression is birthday gift. Also, use it was to form a complete sentence, and use from to show who gave you the gift.

× Yes, I think, uh, in Vietnam people rise, abide, uh, every day from uh, from every age, uh, to, uh, to daily routine.

✓ Yes, I think people in Vietnam ride bikes every day, regardless of their age, as part of their daily routines.

When speaking generally about bicycles, use the plural form bikes. The phrase from every age is not natural; use regardless of their age or of all ages. Daily routines is plural because it refers to the routines of many people.

× Yes, I think, uh, in Vietnam people rise, abide, uh, every day from uh, from every age, uh, to, uh, to daily routine.

✓ Yes, I think people in Vietnam ride bikes every day, regardless of their age, as part of their daily routines.

The preposition to is incorrect before daily routine. The natural expression is as part of their daily routines. Also, in Vietnam is correctly placed before the subject phrase people in Vietnam.

× Yes, I think, uh, in Vietnam people rise, abide, uh, every day from uh, from every age, uh, to, uh, to daily routine.

✓ Yes, I think people in Vietnam ride bikes every day, regardless of their age, as part of their daily routines.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and unclear phrases. A clear structure is subject + verb + object + frequency expression + additional information: people in Vietnam ride bikes every day, regardless of their age, as part of their daily routines.