Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ‘panic’은 자전거가 아니므로 ‘bike’ 또는 ‘bicycle’로 수정해야 합니다. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤, 자전거를 언제 어떻게 사용했는지 구체적인 세부 사항을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 자전거를 선물받았는지, 어디에서 탔는지 설명하면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 효과적입니다.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a small bicycle when I was about seven, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: 의미는 전달되지만 ‘our country thinks so much about the pollution’은 부자연스럽습니다. ‘people are concerned about pollution’ 또는 ‘the government is trying to reduce pollution’처럼 주어와 동사를 더 정확하게 사용하세요. 또한 ‘pollution’ 앞에는 일반적인 오염을 의미할 때 보통 관사를 쓰지 않으며, 자전거가 인기 있는 구체적인 이유나 예시를 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people are concerned about air pollution. In addition, cycling is an affordable way to travel, especially in crowded cities.

× In my opinion, bikes are popular in our country because our country thinks so much about the pollution.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in our country because people in our country think a lot about pollution.

When pollution is used in a general sense, it is an uncountable noun and does not usually take the definite article the. The phrase people in our country also makes the subject more natural because people, rather than a country itself, think about pollution. The present tense is appropriate because the answer describes a general situation.