Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and includes a clear reason and example. However, use articles correctly: say “needed a bike” and “borrowed a bike.” Also, “my nephews” may sound unusual if you mean your relatives’ children; say “my nieces and nephews” or specify who they were. Use a more natural expression such as “I couldn’t afford one” if referring to your family’s financial situation.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. Whenever I needed a bike, I borrowed one from my nephews. It was inconvenient sometimes, but I still enjoyed riding around my neighborhood.

提案: You answer the question directly, but the response contains repeated ideas and several grammatical errors. Avoid repeating “because” and “bikes are so popular,” and replace “it riding bike is a very fascinating” with “riding a bike is fascinating.” Also, explain whether you mean bicycles or motorcycles, because “bikes” can refer to both. Add one specific reason, such as affordability, convenience, or heavy traffic, and use a linking word such as “Moreover” or “For example.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India, especially motorcycles. They are affordable and convenient for commuting, particularly in crowded cities with heavy traffic. Moreover, many young people enjoy riding them because they provide a sense of freedom. For example, motorcycles are commonly used to travel to work or college.

× When I needed bike, I borrowed bike from my nephews.

✓ When I needed a bike, I borrowed a bike from my nephews.

Singular countable nouns such as bike normally need an article when they are mentioned generally. Use a before bike because the speaker is referring to one non-specific bike.

× Yes, bikes are so popular in my country because every boy wants to ride a bike because it riding bike is a very fascinating in Indian roads and that's why bikes are so popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people enjoy riding bikes on Indian roads.

The original sentence contains repeated because clauses and the incorrect structure it riding bike. These clauses make the sentence difficult to follow. Use one clear because clause and make riding bikes the subject of the clause.

× Yes, bikes are so popular in my country because every boy wants to ride a bike because it riding bike is a very fascinating in Indian roads and that's why bikes are so popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because riding a bike is fascinating on Indian roads.

Use a before the singular countable noun bike in riding a bike. Do not use a before fascinating because fascinating is an adjective, not a singular countable noun.

× Yes, bikes are so popular in my country because every boy wants to ride a bike because it riding bike is a very fascinating in Indian roads and that's why bikes are so popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because riding a bike is fascinating on Indian roads.

Use on, not in, when referring to movement or activities taking place on the surface of roads. The correct phrase is on Indian roads.