Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên và bị ngập ngừng. Hãy nói rõ tuổi bằng cấu trúc “when I was seven years old”, dùng quá khứ đơn để nói về chiếc xe trong quá khứ, và dùng “I use a motorbike to get around the city” thay vì “I am used motorbike for go around city”. Ngoài ra, nên tránh các từ đệm như “Yeah, you know” và không cần nói “I’m a dude now”, vì ý này không phù hợp với câu hỏi. Câu trả lời nên gồm câu trả lời trực tiếp, một chi tiết cụ thể và sự tương phản với hiện tại.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was about seven years old. I used to ride it around my neighborhood and sometimes go to school on it. However, I do not have a bicycle anymore because I usually use a motorbike to get around the city.

提案: Bạn đã đưa ra quan điểm nhưng câu trả lời chưa hoàn toàn rõ vì “bikes” có thể chỉ xe đạp hoặc xe máy, trong khi bạn lại chuyển sang nói về motorbike. Hãy xác định rõ rằng xe đạp không phổ biến bằng xe máy, sau đó đưa ra lý do cụ thể như khoảng cách xa, sự tiện lợi hoặc điều kiện giao thông. Cần sửa “people ... use motorbike” thành “people ... use motorbikes” và tránh lặp từ “useful”. Nên dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “whereas” để kết nối ý tưởng mạch lạc hơn.

例: Bicycles are not very popular in my country because most people prefer motorbikes. Motorbikes are more convenient for commuting, especially when people need to travel long distances in busy cities. They are also faster and more practical for everyday activities.

× Of course, if I remember correctly, it was when I-77 years old and now I don't have it.

✓ Of course, if I remember correctly, I was seven years old, and I don't have it anymore.

Use the past-tense form was with the subject I to describe your age in the past. The phrase it was when I was seven years old is structurally incorrect because the subject of was seven years old should be I.

× Of course, if I remember correctly, it was when I-77 years old and now I don't have it.

✓ Of course, if I remember correctly, I was seven years old, and I don't have it anymore.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure: it was when I was seven years old. Use I was seven years old because you are describing your age. Also, use anymore at the end to express that you no longer have the bike.

× I am used motorbike for go around city.

✓ I use a motorbike to get around the city.

Use the simple present I use to describe a current habit. I am used is incorrect here because am used normally requires the preposition to, as in I am used to riding a motorbike.

× I am used motorbike for go around city.

✓ I use a motorbike to get around the city.

Use the indefinite article a before the singular countable noun motorbike. Use the definite article the before city when referring to the city where you live or usually travel.

× I am used motorbike for go around city.

✓ I use a motorbike to get around the city.

The verb go cannot directly follow the preposition for in the original structure. The natural purpose structure is to get around the city. Alternatively, you could say for going around the city.

× Not at all in fact people in my country usually use motorbike to go and from my point of view I find it very useful and and useful and comfortable.

✓ Not at all. In fact, people in my country usually use motorbikes to get around. From my point of view, I find them very useful and comfortable.

Because people generally use more than one motorbike, use the plural form motorbikes. The plural noun also matches the pronoun them later in the sentence.

× Not at all in fact people in my country usually use motorbike to go and from my point of view I find it very useful and and useful and comfortable.

✓ Not at all. In fact, people in my country usually use motorbikes to get around. From my point of view, I find them very useful and comfortable.

The phrase go and from is incomplete and uses the wrong preposition pattern. Use get around to express traveling from place to place by motorbike.

× Not at all in fact people in my country usually use motorbike to go and from my point of view I find it very useful and and useful and comfortable.

✓ Not at all. In fact, people in my country usually use motorbikes to get around. From my point of view, I find them very useful and comfortable.

The pronoun it refers to a singular noun, but the corrected noun motorbikes is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun them. Also, remove the repeated words and to make the sentence clear.