Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add a specific description or memory. Avoid the grammatical error in “My father bought me”; say “My father bought it for me” or “My father bought me a bike.” Also, use linking words such as “It was...” to make the description smoother and avoid hesitation with “I think.”

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was about six years old. It was pink and yellow, with beautiful flowers on the frame, so I absolutely loved it. I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon.

提案: Give a clear opinion without repetition: “From my perspective” and “I think” express the same idea, so use only one. Because “bikes” is plural, say “they are not very popular,” not “it is not popular.” Avoid the unnatural phrase “in Turkey I think not”; say “I don’t think they are very popular in Turkey.” Add a specific reason, such as traffic, safety, or public transportation, to develop your answer.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Turkey nowadays. Although many people used to ride them in the past, cars and public transportation are more common now because they are more convenient for long journeys. However, cycling is becoming more popular in some cities, especially among young people and fitness enthusiasts.

× My father bought me, I think it was pink and yellow and it had flowers on it.

✓ My father bought me a bike. I think it was pink and yellow, and it had flowers on it.

The verb bought normally needs an object that identifies what was purchased. Bought me is incomplete in this context because it does not say what your father bought. Also, the original sentence joins separate clauses with a comma, so dividing it into two sentences improves the sentence structure.

× From my perspective I think it is not popular anymore. In the past it was popular, but nowadays cars are more popular. In other countries like Italy it is popular, but in Turkey I think not.

✓ From my perspective, I think bikes are not popular anymore. In the past, they were popular, but nowadays cars are more popular. In other countries, like Italy, they are popular, but I do not think they are popular in Turkey.

The noun bikes is plural, so it should be replaced by the plural pronoun they, not the singular pronoun it. The verb must also agree with this plural subject: they were and they are. Repeating the subject in the final clause makes the meaning clearer and produces a complete, natural sentence.