Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in the past tense because the question refers to your childhood. Correct the pronunciation and word choice: use “bike,” not “bite,” and say “I got it from my parents” rather than “I call from my parents.” You should also connect the ideas clearly and add one specific detail about how you used the bike. For example, use: “Yes, I had a beautiful bike. My parents bought it for my birthday, and I often rode it around my neighborhood.”

例: Yes, I had a beautiful bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for my birthday, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Give a clear opinion at the beginning instead of saying “I’m not sure,” unless you genuinely want to show uncertainty. Also, the question is about people in general, but your answer only discusses older people. Avoid unnecessary repetition in “a car or motor car”; use “cars” or “motor vehicles.” Support your opinion with a specific comparison or reason, such as traffic, health, or environmental benefits.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many people use them to exercise or travel short distances because they are cheap and environmentally friendly. However, older people usually prefer cars because they are more comfortable.

× Yes, I have a beautiful bite.

✓ Yes, I had a beautiful bike.

The question asks about your childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Change have to had. Bike is also the correct spelling of the word for the vehicle.

× I call from my parents they bought me for my birthday.

✓ I got it from my parents; they bought it for my birthday.

The events happened in the past, so call should be changed to the past-tense verb got. The pronoun it refers to the bike, and a semicolon separates the two complete clauses.

× I'm not sure because nowadays most old people they drive a car or motor car.

✓ I'm not sure because nowadays most older people drive cars.

In standard English, most older people is already the subject, so the extra pronoun they should be removed. Cars is more natural than a car or motor car when speaking about people in general.