Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use clearer grammar. The phrases “which is always was failed” and “always failed to run” are incorrect; say “which was always breaking down” or “which never worked properly.” Use the past tense consistently, and connect the reason and result more naturally. You could also add one specific detail about how you used the bike or how you felt about it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was always breaking down. I often struggled to repair it, and my family never had the chance to buy me a new one. As a result, I rarely used it for long-distance rides.

提案: Give a clear answer at the beginning, then explain the contrast with a linking word such as “however.” Correct the grammar: say “there are many bike enthusiasts,” not “there is so many bike enthusiastic,” and use “bike lanes” or “cycling infrastructure” instead of “roads dedicated for bike cyclists.” Explain specifically why cycling is dangerous, such as heavy traffic or a lack of protected lanes.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people and fitness enthusiasts. However, many roads lack proper bike lanes, and drivers do not always pay attention to cyclists. Therefore, riding a bike can be dangerous, particularly in busy city centres.

× Yes, I used to have a bike which is always was failed, always failed to run and I struggled on fixing it but I never got a chance to get a new bike.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike that always failed to run, and I struggled with fixing it, but I never got a chance to get a new bike.

The answer describes a past childhood experience, so the past-tense verb failed is needed. The phrase is always was failed incorrectly combines present and past forms. Use always failed to describe the bike's repeated problem in the past.

× Yes, I used to have a bike which is always was failed, always failed to run and I struggled on fixing it but I never got a chance to get a new bike.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike that always failed to run, and I struggled with fixing it, but I never got a chance to get a new bike.

The verb struggle is followed by with when it is followed by a noun or an -ing form. Therefore, struggled with fixing it is correct, not struggled on fixing it.

× Even though there is so many bike enthusiastic but the roads are not dedicated for bike cyclists so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

✓ Even though there are so many bike enthusiasts, the roads are not designed for cyclists, so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

Use are, not is, because the noun phrase so many bike enthusiasts is plural. The correct there-be structure is there are so many bike enthusiasts.

× Even though there is so many bike enthusiastic but the roads are not dedicated for bike cyclists so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

✓ Even though there are so many bike enthusiasts, the roads are not designed for cyclists, so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

The quantifier many must be followed by a plural countable noun. Enthusiasts is the plural noun needed here; enthusiastic is an adjective and cannot be used as the noun in this phrase.

× Even though there is so many bike enthusiastic but the roads are not dedicated for bike cyclists so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

✓ Even though there are so many bike enthusiasts, the roads are not designed for cyclists, so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

Enthusiastic is an adjective, but the sentence needs a noun referring to people who like bikes. Use bike enthusiasts instead of bike enthusiastic.

× Even though there is so many bike enthusiastic but the roads are not dedicated for bike cyclists so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

✓ Even though there are so many bike enthusiasts, the roads are not designed for cyclists, so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

Even though already introduces a contrast, so it should not be followed by but in the same clause structure. Use either even though ... or but ..., not both together.

× Even though there is so many bike enthusiastic but the roads are not dedicated for bike cyclists so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

✓ Even though there are so many bike enthusiasts, the roads are not designed for cyclists, so it's dangerous to ride a bike in my country.

Designed for is the natural expression for roads intended to be used by cyclists. Also, cyclists already means people who ride bikes, so bike cyclists is unnecessarily repetitive.