Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly by saying whether you had a bike as a child. Avoid discussing commuting, which is not directly relevant, and do not repeat “bike” and “scooty” several times. Use natural expressions such as “I preferred riding a scooter” and connect your reason with “because.” Also, divide the response into two or three clear sentences instead of giving one long, grammatically inaccurate sentence.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I didn’t know how to use the gears. I preferred riding a scooter, as it was easier for me to handle. I usually used it for short trips around my neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with specific reasons or examples. The phrase “since from the age” is incorrect; use “especially among people aged fourteen to twenty-two.” Avoid repeating “shown” and use a more natural expression such as “many young people are interested in riding them.” You could also mention practical reasons, such as affordability, convenience, or popularity among commuters.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India, especially among young people aged fourteen to twenty-two. Many people choose them because they are more affordable and convenient than cars. They are also useful for commuting through busy city streets.

× I don't prefer using bikes for commuting my daily activities rather than bike I would commute from a two wheeler scooty since I don't know how to ride a bike due to its gear system hence I would prefer scooty over bike.

✓ I didn't prefer using bikes for my daily commute. Instead, I used a two-wheeler scooter because I didn't know how to ride a geared bike. Therefore, I preferred a scooter to a bike.

The question asks about your childhood, so the answer should mainly use the past tense. Use didn't prefer, used, didn't know, and preferred instead of don't prefer, would commute, don't know, and would prefer.

× I don't prefer using bikes for commuting my daily activities rather than bike I would commute from a two wheeler scooty since I don't know how to ride a bike due to its gear system hence I would prefer scooty over bike.

✓ I didn't prefer using bikes for my daily commute. Instead, I used a two-wheeler scooter because I didn't know how to ride a geared bike. Therefore, I preferred a scooter to a bike.

Commute is normally used with for when referring to a purpose, as in commute for work, or with a noun phrase such as daily commute. We also say travel or commute on a scooter, not commute from a scooter. The phrase preferred a scooter to a bike is the natural prepositional pattern.

× I don't prefer using bikes for commuting my daily activities rather than bike I would commute from a two wheeler scooty since I don't know how to ride a bike due to its gear system hence I would prefer scooty over bike.

✓ I didn't prefer using bikes for my daily commute. Instead, I used a two-wheeler scooter because I didn't know how to ride a geared bike. Therefore, I preferred a scooter to a bike.

Singular countable nouns such as bike and scooter usually need an article. Use a bike and a scooter when speaking generally about one example. The original phrases rather than bike and over bike need the article a.

× I don't prefer using bikes for commuting my daily activities rather than bike I would commute from a two wheeler scooty since I don't know how to ride a bike due to its gear system hence I would prefer scooty over bike.

✓ I didn't prefer using bikes for my daily commute. Instead, I used a two-wheeler scooter because I didn't know how to ride a geared bike. Therefore, I preferred a scooter to a bike.

The original response combines several independent ideas without appropriate punctuation or connecting structure, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into shorter sentences and use connectors such as instead, because, and therefore.

× Yes, I think that bikes are quite popular in India since from the age of fourteen to twenty two men or women have shown shown interest in bikes.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are quite popular in India because people between the ages of fourteen and twenty-two have shown interest in bikes.

Since and from should not be used together in this expression. Use because to give a reason, and use between the ages of fourteen and twenty-two to describe an age range naturally.

× Yes, I think that bikes are quite popular in India since from the age of fourteen to twenty two men or women have shown shown interest in bikes.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are quite popular in India because people between the ages of fourteen and twenty-two have shown interest in bikes.

The past participle shown is repeated. In the present perfect structure have shown, the verb shown should appear only once.