Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính phù hợp nhưng mắc nhiều lỗi về từ vựng, ngữ pháp và diễn đạt. “a pink by green” cần sửa thành “a pink-and-green bike” hoặc “a pink bike with green details”. Cụm “I was small in order to for me to...” không tự nhiên; nên nói “When I was little, I used it to ride around with my friends and go to school.” Tránh lặp “to rode a bike to ride a bike” và dùng đúng thì quá khứ “rode” hoặc cấu trúc “used it to ride”.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a pink-and-green bike when I was little. I used it to ride around with my friends and sometimes to go to school.

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và có đưa ra lý do, nhưng cần sửa lỗi số nhiều và cách dùng từ. “bike” nên là “bikes”, còn “in order to ride in a park” nên đổi thành “to ride them in parks”. Cụm “in a regular in a daily basis” không đúng; hãy dùng “on a regular basis” hoặc “in their daily lives”. Nên diễn đạt rõ hơn rằng xe đạp không phổ biến cho việc đi lại hằng ngày vì giao thông đông đúc và không an toàn, đồng thời sử dụng từ nối như “because” hoặc “as a result”.

例: Well, not really. Bikes are mainly used for leisure activities, such as riding in parks, rather than for daily transportation. This is because the traffic in Vietnam is often crowded and unsafe for cyclists.

× Yes, my parents bought me a pink by green.

✓ Yes, my parents bought me a pink and green bike.

By is a preposition and cannot connect two colors in this sentence. Use the conjunction and to join pink and green. The noun bike is also added to make the description complete.

× I was small in order to for me to go around with my friends and to rode a bike to ride a bike to school.

✓ I was young, so I could ride a bike to school with my friends.

The structure in order to for me to is incorrect because it combines two different structures. Use so I could to express the result in the past. The original sentence also repeats to ride a bike and contains the unnecessary phrase to rode a bike.

× I was small in order to for me to go around with my friends and to rode a bike to ride a bike to school.

✓ I was young, so I could ride a bike to school with my friends.

Could is the appropriate past form of can when describing ability in the past. After a modal verb such as could, use the base form of the verb: could ride, not could rode or could riding.

× Vietnamese people only use bike in order to ride in a park or somewhere else.

✓ Vietnamese people only use bikes to ride in parks or somewhere else.

When talking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular countable noun bike. Parks is also plural because the statement refers to parks in general.

× Vietnamese people only use bike in order to ride in a park or somewhere else.

✓ Vietnamese people only use a bike to ride in a park or somewhere else.

A singular countable noun needs an article. Use a bike when referring to one nonspecific bicycle. Alternatively, use bikes when speaking about bicycles in general.

× Vietnamese people only use bike in order to ride in a park or somewhere else, because the traffic here is not suitable to ride the bike in a regular in a daily basis.

✓ Vietnamese people only use bikes to ride in parks or somewhere else because the traffic here is not suitable for riding bikes on a regular or daily basis.

Use suitable for followed by a noun or an -ing form, so suitable for riding is correct. Use on, not in, before the expression a regular or daily basis. The preposition in is used before places such as a park, not before basis in this expression.

× Vietnamese people only use bike in order to ride in a park or somewhere else, because the traffic here is not suitable to ride the bike in a regular in a daily basis.

✓ Vietnamese people only use bikes to ride in parks or somewhere else because the traffic here is not suitable for riding bikes on a regular or daily basis.

After the preposition for, use the gerund form riding rather than the infinitive ride. The pattern suitable for + verb-ing is the natural grammatical structure here.