Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and finish your response with a clear concluding idea. Use the past continuous correctly: “when I was playing,” not “when I playing.” Also, avoid repeating “play” and do not end with “but.” Connect the reason and result with linking words such as “because” and “so,” and add one specific detail about the bike or how you felt.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I was quite afraid to ride it because I often fell off when I was playing with my friends. As a result, I stopped riding for a while, but I eventually became more confident.

提案: State your opinion clearly at the beginning: “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Replace unclear phrases such as “it’s several in several years” and “it’s like a viral” with natural expressions like “their popularity has increased in recent years” and “cycling has become a trend on social media.” Use plural forms correctly: “bikes,” “many types of people,” and “everyone.” Organize the answer with linking words and provide a specific reason or example.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, and their popularity has increased in recent years. People of all ages ride them for exercise, transportation, and relaxation. In addition, cycling has become a trend on social media, so many people post photos and videos of their rides.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I was afraid to ride it because when I playing with my friends I often fell off so it made me reluctant to play for a while but

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I was afraid to ride it because when I was playing with my friends, I often fell off, which made me reluctant to ride it for a while.

The action was happening in the past, so the past continuous form was playing is needed after when. The auxiliary verb was must be used before the present participle playing.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I was afraid to ride it because when I playing with my friends I often fell off so it made me reluctant to play for a while but

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I was afraid to ride it. When I was playing with my friends, I often fell off, which made me reluctant to ride it for a while.

The original sentence contains several clauses connected without clear punctuation and ends with the unnecessary conjunction but. Dividing the response into two sentences makes the relationships between the ideas clearer.

× I think it's several in several years.

✓ I think it has become more popular in recent years.

Several is a quantifier and cannot describe how popular something is in this sentence. More popular correctly expresses an increase in popularity, and in recent years is the natural time expression.

× Bike is really popular in our country many type of people riding a bike it's like a viral in social media too.

✓ Bikes are really popular in our country. Many types of people ride bikes, and biking has also become popular on social media.

Bikes is used in the plural when talking about bikes in general, so the plural verb are is required. Types must also be plural after many. The phrase many types of people ride bikes uses the simple present to describe a general fact.

× Bike is really popular in our country many type of people riding a bike it's like a viral in social media too.

✓ Bikes are really popular in our country. Many types of people ride bikes, and biking has also become popular on social media.

The original phrase many types of people riding a bike does not contain a finite verb. Use ride in the simple present to describe a regular or general activity.

× Bike is really popular in our country many type of people riding a bike it's like a viral in social media too.

✓ Bikes are really popular in our country. Many types of people ride bikes, and biking has also become popular on social media.

The natural preposition is on social media, not in social media, when referring to content or activities appearing on social-media platforms.

× Bike is really popular in our country many type of people riding a bike it's like a viral in social media too.

✓ Bikes are really popular in our country. Many types of people ride bikes, and biking has also become popular on social media.

Viral is normally an adjective, so a viral is incorrect in this context. The sentence can be expressed naturally as biking has become popular on social media.

× Every people try to post it.

✓ Many people try to post about it.

Every cannot be used directly before the plural noun people. Many people is the correct quantifier phrase when referring to a large number of people.

× Every people try to post it.

✓ Everyone tries to post about it.

Everyone is grammatically singular, so the verb must be tries, not try. The phrase post about it is also more natural when referring to posting content related to bikes or biking.