Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변의 의미가 서로 모순됩니다. 처음에 자전거가 없었다고 말한 뒤, “I rode my friends’ bicycles”처럼 누구의 자전거를 탔는지 설명해야 합니다. “when I was charged”는 이 문맥에서 자연스럽지 않으므로 “when I was a child” 또는 “when I was younger”를 사용하세요. 또한 과거의 경험이므로 “ride”가 아니라 “rode”를 사용하고, “Instead of that”보다는 “However” 또는 “Instead”가 더 자연스럽습니다. 질문에 직접 답한 후 구체적인 이유나 경험을 한 문장 덧붙이면 더 효과적입니다.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. However, I sometimes rode my friends’ bicycles in the neighborhood. I really enjoyed it because it was a fun way to spend time outdoors.

提案: 첫 문장은 “Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in my country.”처럼 질문에 바로 답하도록 구성하세요. “in my country”를 반복하지 말고, “many people who ride their bike” 대신 “many people ride bikes”를 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다. “more cheaper”는 이중 비교급이므로 “cheaper”라고 해야 하며, 자전거와 자동차의 편안함을 단순히 비교하기보다는 교통비 절약이나 환경 보호 같은 구체적인 이유를 연결어와 함께 제시하세요. 현재 답변은 2문장이지만 같은 내용이 반복되므로 더 간결하고 정확하게 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and young adults. Many people ride them because they are cheaper than cars and better for the environment. In addition, bikes are convenient for short trips in crowded cities.

× Instead of that, I ride on my bicycle.

✓ Instead, I rode my bicycle.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. The past form of ride is rode. Also, instead is the more natural transition here.

× Yes I do in my country.

✓ Yes, I do. Bikes are popular in my country.

The original sentence combines a short answer and a location phrase awkwardly. Separating the ideas into two complete sentences makes the response clearer and more natural.

× I see many people who ride their bike in my country because bike is more cheaper than cars and is more comfortable.

✓ I see many people who ride their bikes in my country because bikes are cheaper than cars and more comfortable.

The plural subject many people refers to more than one bicycle, so use their bikes. Bike is being used in a general sense, so the plural form bikes is more appropriate. The plural subject bikes also requires the plural verb are.

× I see many people who ride their bike in my country because bike is more cheaper than cars and is more comfortable.

✓ I see many people who ride their bikes in my country because bikes are cheaper than cars and more comfortable.

Do not use more with the comparative form cheaper. Use either cheaper or more cheap, but cheaper is the correct and natural choice. The comparison should also be parallel: bikes are cheaper than cars and more comfortable than cars.