Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本回应了“有自行车”这一问题，但表达不够直接，且出现了明显的词汇和语法错误。比如，“reading back”应改为“riding bikes”，“in the neighbor”应改为“in my neighborhood”，“I had it”可以更自然地说成“I had one”。建议先用清晰的主题句直接回答，再补充骑车的地点和同伴；同时减少“umm”“uh”以及“very, very”等重复表达。

例: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my classmates. We usually cycled in the park or in my garden because it was a fun way to spend time together.

提案: 回答观点明确，提到了共享单车这一具体例子，但句子没有完整结束，且“there is a kind of bicycle named shared bicycle”表达不自然，建议改为“shared bikes are very popular”。“everyone can ride it every time”不够准确，可以说明“people can rent them through an app”。建议使用“because”“for example”等连接词，并补充共享单车方便、环保或常见的具体原因。

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially shared bikes. People can rent them through a mobile app, so they are convenient for short journeys. For example, you can often see many people riding them near subway stations and shopping areas.

× Well, actually, umm, I had it back when I was young, uh, because I really love reading back with my classmates, uh, in the neighbor in my, umm, own garden.

✓ Well, actually, umm, I had one when I was young, uh, because I really loved riding bikes with my classmates, uh, in my neighborhood and in my own garden.

在回答“小时候是否有一辆自行车”时，使用“one”表示“同类中的一个”，比“it”更自然。“It”通常指前面已经明确提到的某一个特定物品。此外，问题询问的是过去的经历，所以“love”应改为过去式“loved”。“reading back”不符合语境；如果想表达“骑车”，应使用“riding bikes”。

× There is a kind of bicycle named shared bicycle, uh, everyone can ride it every time.

✓ There is a kind of bicycle called a shared bicycle, and everyone can ride one at any time.

“shared bicycle”是普通可数名词，前面需要使用不定冠词“a”。另外，两个完整分句不能只用逗号连接，应使用“and”连接。“at any time”比“every time”更适合表达“随时”。

× It is very famous in my country, you can see many people in the.

✓ It is very popular in my country, and you can see many people riding shared bicycles there.

原句用逗号连接两个完整句子，形成逗号拼接错误；应使用“and”连接。“in the”后面缺少名词，导致句子不完整。可以改为“there”，表示“在那里”。“many people riding shared bicycles”结构完整，能够清楚表达“许多人正在骑共享单车”。