Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with “Definitely,” and correct the grammatical and vocabulary errors: “Definitely,” not “Diffinstly”; “I loved riding because,” not “I loved riding is because”; and “it made me feel more independent,” instead of the unnatural phrase “more confident on the world.” Avoid beginning a separate sentence with “And”; use “I also” to link the final detail. Add a specific description of where or when you cycled to make the answer more vivid.

例: Definitely. When I was a child, my parents bought me a bike so that I could ride around our village. I loved cycling because it made me feel more independent, and I often rode to the beach with my friends after school.

提案: Your answer has a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but correct “rush showers” to “rush hour.” Add commas after introductory phrases, such as “In cities, especially,” or use the more natural structure “Especially in cities.” You could also mention one specific benefit, such as avoiding traffic or reducing pollution, to develop your answer. Finish with a complete sentence and avoid unnecessary repetition of “fast” and “convenient.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and practical way to commute. Especially in large cities, bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes make cycling convenient during rush hour. In addition, many people choose bikes because they can avoid traffic and reduce their commuting costs.

× I loved riding is because it made me faster and more confident on the world.

✓ I loved riding because it made me faster and more confident in the world.

The word 'is' is unnecessary and creates an incorrect sentence structure. After 'I loved riding,' use 'because' directly to introduce the reason. The preposition 'in' is also required in the expression 'in the world,' rather than 'on the world.'

× I loved riding is because it made me faster and more confident on the world.

✓ I loved riding because it made me faster and more confident in the world.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to someone's experience or position within the world. Use 'in the world.' Learn common preposition combinations as fixed expressions, such as 'in the world,' 'at work,' and 'on the road.'